Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In this modern world,Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government.I agree with latter notion.
To commence with, the government have the responsibility of providing a convenient and more developed life for its citizens and this can be achieved only through medical research. Moreover, scientist investigation in medicine come with new way to deal or treat illness or diseases.As well as ,it is the duty of government to. improve the health problem of the general public.the government, having the health of people in mind insead of profit .for example , In USA ,there are many people who provide funded the investigation and research work carried out during the covid 19 pandemic
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Furthermore, private institutions are more profit driver. Regardless of, they do not care about the effect of the medical experience on the health of individual because they are more profit oriented.In addition, people as most time do not have sufficient resources to fund research project abd and this can be disappointing to medical field as well as scientist
In conclusion, government should play the greater role of financing medical investigation because it is their responsibility and also thry have enough means of sponsoring than private institutions
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the prompt by expressing a clear position supporting government-funded medical research. However, there are significant issues. First, the response is under-length, containing only 217 words against the required 250-word minimum, which heavily penalises the overall Task Achievement score. Furthermore, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. While the writer mentions the government's duty and the profit-driven nature of private institutions, the arguments lack sufficient depth, extension, and clear supporting evidence. For instance, the reference to the USA during the COVID-19 pandemic is muddled and unclear. Because the response falls short of the word count and lacks fully developed supporting points, it corresponds to a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is organised into paragraphs, featuring basic attempts at an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, overall progression is limited by choppy sentence structures and abrupt transitions. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as starting a sentence with 'As well as ,' or the disjointed referencing seen in 'Regardless of, they do not care...'. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal paragraph cohesion frequently breaks down due to sentence fragments and punctuation errors, making the logical flow difficult to follow at times. This performance aligns well with the Band 5 descriptor for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The lexical resource is limited and basic. The writer uses words appropriate to the general topic, such as 'medical research', 'government', and 'private institutions', but demonstrates noticeable errors in word choice, form, and collocation. Examples include 'scientist investigation' instead of 'scientific investigation', 'profit driver' instead of 'profit-driven', and 'medical experience' instead of 'medical experiments'. There are also frequent spelling and typos such as 'insead' and 'thry'. The range of vocabulary is barely adequate to communicate the basic argument, preventing the score from rising above Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentences, but grammatical control is weak throughout the essay. Frequent errors include subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'the government have', 'scientist investigation... come'), missing articles, and incomplete sentences (e.g., 'it is the duty of government to. improve...'). Punctuation and spacing are also problematic, with random spaces before punctuation marks and fragmented sentences. Although simple structures are occasionally correct, the high frequency of intrusive grammatical errors places this response solidly in the Band 5 category.
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