Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Private companies carrying most of the funding for medical research these days and some people argue that the research funding should be done by government and many individuals belive that it should be done by private companies and individuals. I believe that the funding should be done by both the private and public bodies.
Firstly, medical research projects are funded by private companies and individuals is mainly for discovery of certain objectives of particular company. Lage business bodies try to invistigate and extract information about specific objects. For example: Pharma companies such as Cipla, basically they fund medical research projects and discover medecine and later they patent that formula so that every other company cannot use it. Funding from the private companies and individuals are indirectly considered as investments as they get benifit with the formula which is discovered by the medical research team.
Government funded medical research teams are always secretive and they follow proper pattern for the medical research. The government funded labs and reseaech teams are usually associared to national safety first motive where as private companies may not always prioritize nation as business is their priority.
For example: During Corona virus our government produced the vaccine for it and most of the people in our country got benifit. If it was a private company, the vaccine could first reached the wealthy.
In conclusion, some people argue that medical research should be funded by private but I mostly believe that mecal research is to be funded by government bodies as they maintain secrecy.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the roles of private companies and governments in funding medical research, eventually presenting a clear position that funding should come from both bodies. However, the introduction contains a contradictory statement ('some people argue that the research funding should be done by government and many individuals belive that it should be done by private companies and individuals. I believe that the funding should be done by both'). The main body paragraphs provide relevant examples, such as Cipla and the COVID-19 vaccine, but the arguments are somewhat underdeveloped and repetitive, leaning on generalisations rather than fully extended reasoning. It meets the general demands of Task 2, but the clarity of position and depth of support place it at a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with clear paragraphing, separating the introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Transitional markers such as 'Firstly' and 'In conclusion' are used to structure the text. However, cohesion at the sentence level is occasionally faulty or mechanical. For instance, the opening sentence is a run-on structure ('Private companies carrying most of the funding... and some people argue... and many individuals belive...'). Furthermore, referencing and logical flow between ideas occasionally falter, such as the abrupt transition in the third paragraph regarding government secrecy and national safety. These issues reflect Band 6 characteristics, where cohesion can be faulty or mechanical.
Lexical Resource: Band 6.0
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating terms such as 'investigate', 'patent', 'formula', and 'prioritize'. However, there are notable spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, including 'belive', 'Lage', 'invistigate', 'medecine', 'benifit' (used multiple times), and 'associared'. Additionally, collocations are sometimes weak, such as 'associated to national safety first motive'. While communication is not severely impeded, these frequent lexical inaccuracies prevent the essay from reaching Band 6.5 or 7.0, making a Band 6.0 score appropriate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, including conditional and relative clauses ('so that every other company cannot use it', 'If it was a private company...'). However, grammatical accuracy is inconsistent. There are several structural errors and missing auxiliary verbs, such as 'Private companies carrying most of the funding' (should be 'carry' or 'are carrying'), 'research projects are funded by private companies and individuals is mainly' (agreement error), and 'vaccine could first reached the wealthy' (tense/modal error). Punctuation and basic syntax lapses occur frequently. Because errors are noticeable and sometimes cause the reader hesitation, the performance aligns best with Band 5.0.
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