Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
development has reached many medical research programes are beinf funded by private compaanies. In my opinion i beleve research must be funded by both goverment and private companies. this essay will discasse the mine resons on why medical research shoud be funded by both government and privet companies.
To began with, medical investegations must be funded by privet companies. becase this will encourge people how own companies to work more dut to alot of opportunties will apeare to young people. which can helps the econome growth. For example, during covld19 alot privet compaines invested money on medical research and as a result new medicines showed up. and the pandamic disbeared quicly. and more research going on to devolpe new medican and tretment.
Further more, i fuonded useful if government take a role on medical research to. Because gevornment can make lows and this lows lead to significant chane in the world. which going to help alot in health feald and moer effective treatment will be discover and moer people will get to live anormal life. For instance, goernment funded invstegations and more desises decreased like ADIES and others. also with the support of the government people will get encourg to achive more and more research and that lead to a crucial development in the medical feild.
In conclusion, I strongly think sharing responseblty between privet conpanies and govrnment will lead to better world with less desises and more healthly people live in it. with big apportuntes to employes and invesmnt in medical feiled.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position that medical research should be funded by both governments and private companies. Ideas are introduced and supported with relevant examples, such as referencing the COVID-19 pandemic and diseases like AIDS to illustrate the impact of private and governmental investment. However, the development of ideas remains somewhat generalized and brief. While the task is fully addressed and a clear stance is maintained throughout, the supporting arguments lack deeper elaboration, placing this response firmly in Band 6 according to the task achievement descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay demonstrates a coherent overall arrangement with clear paragraphing, including an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical. Transition phrases are basic or misused, such as 'To began with', 'Further more', and 'i fuonded useful', which detracts from the flow. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and punctuation errors break up the cohesion within sentences. Progression is discernible, but the mechanical nature of the cohesive devices and organizational lapses limit the score to a Band 5.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The student uses an adequate vocabulary range to communicate ideas about medical research, funding, and economic growth. However, there are numerous severe spelling errors throughout the text, including 'beinf', 'compaanies', 'beleve', 'discass', 'mine', 'resons', 'shoud', 'privet', 'investegations', 'becase', 'dur', 'opportunties', 'apeare', 'econome', 'covld19', 'disbeared', 'medican', 'tretment', 'gevoernment', 'lows', 'feald', 'desises', 'ADIES', 'encourg', 'responseblty', and 'invesmnt'. These spelling errors and faulty word choices significantly impede readability and strain the reader, placing the lexical resource score at a Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical and punctuation accuracy is extremely weak. There are frequent sentence boundary errors, such as starting sentences with conjunctions or fragmenting clauses (e.g., 'which can helps the econome growth', 'and as a result new medicines showed up. and the pandamic disbeared quicly'). Subject-verb agreement errors ('research going on', 'government can make lows and this lows lead') and persistent capitalization issues (e.g., lowercase 'i', 'covld19') are pervasive. Errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader and obscure meaning, resulting in a Band 4 score.
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