Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In today's world, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In my opinion government should have the more responsibility, but private organizations also support them.
On the one hand policies maker should given more money for medical researches. One major reason why i agree with this is from these assets the field related individuals could research more advance. This is because now a days many viruses are produced which caused many major deaths for the individuals. For example, after some years ago corona virus can effects the many deaths of the populations. Thus govenments should spend money in their vaccines and solutions.
Another major reason why i agree with this is about public health. This is mainly because many peoples are at this time are suffering from differnt kind of health problems. For instance from sometime diabeties and blood pressure are very common type of health related issues. Thats why government should decreased them with the help of their permanent solution.
On the other hand, Private companies also valuable because they can doing grater inovation on these research projects. This is because these organizations could greater the efficiency of work and getting very benefical results from it. This could produce the way in which they can get benefical profits from it. For example when the government invest on the research projects and private companies can doing these researches they can generate money from it.
In contrast, Individuals can contibute the ideas but they cannot doing reserches from themselves because they do not have much resources so they can only support the both.
In conclusion, Government should spend the grater funds and help the individuals , private companies can doing these researches and getting their profits from it and individuals can support them.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing private companies, individuals, and the government in relation to medical research funding. The writer takes a clear position that the government should take primary responsibility while private organizations and individuals also play supporting roles. However, the ideas are somewhat limited and lack deep development. For instance, the discussion on how the government should decrease health problems like diabetes and blood pressure remains rather superficial. While supporting points are provided—such as mentioning the coronavirus pandemic and the innovation capacity of private companies—they are underdeveloped and tend to over-generalise. Therefore, this performance aligns well with Band 6.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with clear paragraphing, separating the introduction, government role, private company role, individual contributions, and conclusion. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'On the one hand', 'Another major reason', and 'In conclusion', but their use is at times mechanical or faulty (e.g., 'In contrast' used to introduce individual contributions rather than a direct contrast). Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the pronoun use in 'so they can only support the both'. While logical organization is present, the cohesion shows weaknesses, placing it firmly at Band 5.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common items such as 'organizations', 'efficiency', and 'innovation'. However, there are frequent word-choice errors, incorrect word forms, and non-standard collocations throughout the text (e.g., 'policies maker should given', 'research more advance', 'govenments should spend money in their vaccines', and 'doing grater inovation'). Spelling errors also occur, such as 'diabeties' and 'contibute'. Although these lexical inaccuracies and spelling errors are noticeable and occasionally cause strain for the reader, communication is generally maintained, which corresponds to Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing subordinate clauses with 'because', 'when', and 'so'. However, grammatical accuracy is weak. There are frequent and systematic errors in verb forms, tenses, subject-verb agreement, and articles (e.g., 'government should have the more responsibility', 'policies maker should given', 'corona virus can effects the many deaths', and 'companies can doing these researches'). Many attempts at complex structures result in faulty grammar. These errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader and prevent the text from achieving a higher band, making Band 5 an appropriate score.
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