Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Now a days projects are funded by private companies for many medical reseach.It will help people find a good health care for surely.In my opininon i think that reasearch should be carried by government.
On the one hand,i think government should individuals carried by mediacal reserch,it will be better way to research projects for funded.Firstly, government should clear all mater with people.Also for people can find good medicine for their everyday life and it stop every corruption sides.Secondly,also people shoud encourage with government ideas.For example if people and government have a good bonding,it will help for future goals.There fore government must strickly solve these problem for clearly,also clearly maintain ideal reaseach about medical research.
On the other hand,government research also help all corruption system directly and it will be helping people to find out a good medicine.Firstly,people find a good medicine and good health care,just becuase of if government providing these service by own resposibility.Secondly if government provide this service people also take care their healthy life with low cost,in addition it also help people for their budget saving.For instance if government research projects are very firstly growt in every sector of every contry it will be surely beneficial for normal people.There fore people must agree with government decision,i think it will more helping side comparing to many medical private companies.
In conclusion,i agree that government should take responsibility for mediacal projects research for atlest people benefit.And i think i will be much better decesion to government take this fund.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position that medical research should be carried out and funded by the government. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive throughout the essay. While the student attempts to present reasons such as corruption prevention and cost reduction, these points are underdeveloped and lack clear, logical support. The expression 'i think that reasearch should be carried by government' directly answers the prompt, and the overall stance is maintained. Nevertheless, the arguments struggle to move beyond general assertions, resulting in a performance that fits the Band 5 descriptor where ideas are limited and partially developed.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The essay is divided into an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, showing an attempt at paragraphing. However, logical progression is hindered by repetitive phrasing and poor integration of ideas. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and sometimes incorrectly, such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'There fore' appearing in similar patterns across multiple paragraphs. Referencing is frequently unclear, and sentences often lack smooth transitions from one thought to the next, causing the reader to pause. These features align with the Band 4 to Band 5 descriptors, reflecting basic organization with noticeable flaws in overall cohesion and logical flow.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on everyday words and inaccurate collocations like 'every corruption sides' or 'clearing all mater'. There are numerous spelling and word-form errors, including 'reseach', 'opininon', 'reasearch', 'mater', 'shoud', 'strickly', 'becuase', 'resposibility', 'healthy life', 'decesion', and 'atlest'. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for conveying a simple message, though these persistent errors cause difficulty for the reader and prevent the text from reaching a higher band level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences are frequent, and attempts at complex or conditional forms are almost entirely faulty, such as 'just becuase of if government providing these service by own resposibility'. Punctuation errors are common, including missing spaces after full stops ('research.It'), lowercase 'i' pronouns, and comma splices. Errors in basic grammar—such as subject-verb agreement and article usage—occur in nearly every sentence and frequently impede comprehension, which corresponds directly to the Band 4 criteria for grammatical range and accuracy.
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