Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In recent time, the burden to provide funding for the numerous medical research projects are on private companies only. This essay will discuss who should raise the fund for such researches like, private companies, individuals or government before giving my opinion with valid reasons and relevant examples in forthcoming paragraphs.

Firstly, the major reason to support research should funded by private companies, there is number of pharmacheutical private company who spends their money for medical research to gain certain advantage from it, furthermore many companies sign contract with the groups who does such research. For instance, these companies asks for some amount of share or take advantage from the research if the project gains popularity, they want the name of their company on such curriculum to gain their comapny popularity and make it known amoung the society, In exchange these company open doors of their high technology and well equiped lab for scientists and sponsor all the needed materials.

Secondly, the reason that supports individual should fund for their medical research. sometimes its hard to convince company or government or any other group to sponsor such projects due to, lack of potenitial, researchers unable to show the outcome and benefit or lack of condfidence is determined from them. However, they should not wait for external aid instead of they should spend their own money and start the project. For example, many individual is not in favour to share their project success with any other group as they have worked so hard to make it successful.

Lastly, government also can help in such projects. The youth is the future of the country and government should take care of their future because of several reasons such as, They can benefit from the outcome for their country growth and If government does not give sponsorship then research unable to conduct and rearchers may move out to foreighn countries to gain support and foreign company will get advantage from the results and use to grow their company. As a result of, foreign country economy will grow stronger. That is the reason government should step in and put country money into usage for such works.

To conclude, Every type funding has its own advantage and disadvantage. However, the one type that make incline towards is government funding. In my opinion, I believe that medical research are funded by government to improve country economy and give yougster chance to get success.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing private companies, individuals, and the government as potential funders of medical research, and states a clear position in favour of government funding. However, the development of ideas is uneven. While the role of private companies is discussed with some supporting ideas regarding corporate exposure and resource sharing, other sections remain limited and under-developed. For instance, the paragraph arguing that individuals should fund their own research lacks realistic elaboration, resulting in arguments that are somewhat unconvincing and restricted in scope. To move to a higher level, the writer would need to extend and support all main points with more fully realised examples and a more rigorous exploration of why a particular funding source is superior.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay demonstrates a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt to structure the response through standard paragraphing and basic signposts such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', 'Lastly', and 'To conclude'. However, the progression of ideas is occasionally disrupted by mechanical or faulty cohesion. For example, referencing is sometimes unclear, as seen in transitions like 'instead of they should spend their own money' and 'As a result of, foreign country economy will grow stronger'. Paragraphing is present and separates the main arguments logically, but the internal flow within paragraphs relies heavily on repetitive sentence openings and basic connectors rather than skilful, varied cohesive devices. Further development of logical bridges between sentences is required to achieve a smoother flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited but minimally adequate to convey the basic message of the essay. The writer attempts some less common terms and subject-related vocabulary such as 'pharmaceutical', 'technology', and 'sponsorship', but these attempts are frequently marred by spelling errors and awkward word choices, such as 'pharmacheutical', 'amoung', 'potenitial', and 'condfidence'. Additionally, word forms are sometimes inaccurate, as observed in 'many individual is not in favour' and 'research unable to conduct'. These noticeable lexical errors and spelling mistakes cause some difficulty for the reader and restrict the range of vocabulary. To improve, the writer needs to expand their control of word choice, ensure correct spelling, and apply more precise phrasing for academic writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response displays a limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and attempts at complex structures that are frequently faulty. There are frequent errors in verb forms, subject-verb agreement, and articles throughout the text. Examples include 'the burden to provide funding... are on private companies', 'research should funded by private companies', 'there is number of', and 'medical research are funded'. Punctuation errors also occur, such as comma splices and dangling transitions like 'As a result of,'. These frequent errors require the reader to occasionally decipher the intended meaning. Achieving a higher band requires producing more error-free sentences while mastering a wider variety of complex grammatical forms.

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