Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the early morning, Medical reserches are carried by the private companies, in the contrast i should suggests my thoughts that are different in some ways.

in the recent decade there is compelling evedience many majority of the medical reserch projects are handel by the private companies. in my opinion every reserchers are under obversion in an indivals or a party or like company. they are work ondifferent medical things such as differents deseases, different medicience and other stuff. they work for companies because they pay highly to them.

on the other hand when the governeemnt tke care of this work on their own under observation that surly get benifint for both.

govt should pay all researcher with their expectation and their facilites.

As my prospective, on a large scale private companies carried all reachers not just medical related they have all like techonologist artiest and engenires.

as we know, most of the investors deal with the companies for their work. they invest highly in the mediciens drugs and all the goods when reachers work they spent millions on their reachers. they works on patient their mediciens hen the medicin work on the patient then the farmula successed afterthat the medicine prepare on the large scale that is use for many hospilats and medical stores. as my experience their is a company that name ali gohar and co. which are worked with reachers and investor on a international base.

at the overview, i suggest that govt should pay reachers that they work for nation or our country, because that should be profitable for both govt and companies and reachers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response addresses the task only minimally, as the discussion of whether research should be carried out by private companies, individuals, or the government remains somewhat limited and underdeveloped. While the student attempts to present a position—suggesting that the government should support researchers financially—the ideas lack clear, extended support. Phrases like 'govt should pay all researcher with their expectation and their facilites' express a general thought, but they are not fully elaborated with specific arguments or well-chosen examples. The mention of 'ali gohar and co.' is too brief and personal to effectively support the broader debate about public versus private funding. To move to a higher level, the writer needs to explore the advantages and disadvantages of each funding body—private, individual, and government—in greater depth, providing fully developed arguments for each viewpoint.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Information and ideas are not arranged in a fully coherent manner throughout the essay. While there are basic attempts to organise the text into paragraphs, the progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by abrupt shifts in topic and a lack of logical transitions. For instance, moving from the introduction to 'in the recent decade there is compelling evedience' creates a disjointed flow. Cohesive devices are used inadequately or inaccurately; phrases like 'on the other hand', 'As my prospective', and 'at the overview' are mechanically applied and do not establish clear relationships between sentences and ideas. Furthermore, referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the writer's line of reasoning. To achieve better cohesion, the student should ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single clear theme and that transition words are used naturally to link ideas together.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, employing words such as 'reserches', 'companies', 'mediciens', and 'reachers' frequently throughout the text. There are numerous noticeable errors in spelling, word form, and word choice—such as 'evedience', 'handel', 'obversion', 'indivals', 'deseases', 'hospilats', and 'farmula'—which place a strain on the reader and occasionally impede communication. The range of vocabulary is limited to everyday terms, and attempts to use less common or academic lexical items result in incorrect forms. To improve lexical resource, the writer needs to expand their vocabulary range, pay closer attention to word spelling and morphological forms, and learn standard collocations related to academic topics such as research, funding, and medical science.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical structures used are very limited, consisting mainly of simple sentences with frequent errors that distort meaning. There is a lack of control over basic grammar, including verb forms and tenses ('Medical reserches are carried', 'they are work ondifferent medical things', 'when reachers work they spent millions'), subject-verb agreement ('every reserchers are'), and articles ('the governeemnt tke care'). Attempts at complex sentence structures are often faulty and cause considerable difficulty for the reader. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing capitalization at the beginning of sentences and improper comma splices. To progress, the writer must focus on foundational grammar rules, improving verb tense consistency, correct subject-verb agreement, and building accurate simple and complex sentence patterns.

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