Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In today's world there are so many disease and new disease. So, we need the new medical resarch to cure this type of new and old disease.Old disease because we need more accurate resarch then the old resarch to cure disease and save the time.There are so many private companies who run the medical resarch projects and the government also run this type of project.But, the every medical resarch which is run by private companies is under control by the governments

In my opinion, yes every medical resarch projects are funded by individuals private companies. But furthermore they get so many type of helps by the government. Example like thet get a loan to resarch medical projects and also they get the government supports to carry on the medical resarch.But the private companies must have to follows the rule which is made by government

In some cases some private companies makes fraud with the government. They use the name of the medical resarch project and do fraud work like they show their black money as a white money. In this type of cases making a question on why the private companies run the medical resarch project by his own individuals funds.For this of cases government have to make sure private companies should follows all the rules and if the rules are break sometime government have to take some serious actions.

In the conclusion we can say that the private companies runs the medical resarch project by his own individuals funds but the government make sure that the private companies follow the rules And, some time the rules is break government should take some serious actions on private companies who break the rules.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the task only partially. Your position on whether research should be carried out by private companies, individuals, or the government is somewhat unclear because the writing tends to drift between different ideas without fully taking a firm stand. Furthermore, your ideas are limited and under-developed, relying heavily on repetitive statements about diseases, government rules, and companies doing fraud. To reach a higher level, you need to clearly state your main position in the introduction, maintain that perspective throughout the essay, and extend your arguments with detailed explanations and concrete examples rather than general assertions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation to your writing, but it lacks a clear overall progression from beginning to end. While you have attempted to divide your thoughts into paragraphs, the flow between ideas is often hindered by repetitive phrasing, such as constantly repeating 'medical research projects' and 'private companies'. Additionally, your use of cohesive devices is inadequate or inaccurate; words like 'So', 'But', and 'For this of cases' are used mechanically and repetitively rather than to create smooth, logical links between sentences. To improve, you should focus on varying your transitions and ensuring that each paragraph moves the argument forward progressively.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary range is limited and minimally adequate for the task. Throughout the response, there are noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and spelling—such as spelling 'research' as 'resarch' multiple times, using 'disease' instead of the plural 'diseases', and writing 'makes fraud' instead of 'commits fraud'. These errors and the heavy repetition of basic vocabulary cause some difficulty for the reader. To achieve a higher score, you need to build a broader and more precise vocabulary, correctly use word forms and collocations, and eliminate spelling mistakes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Your grammar displays a limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences joined by basic conjunctions. Attempts at more complex sentences are often faulty, featuring frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, articles, prepositions, and sentence construction—such as 'In this type of cases making a question on why...' and 'the every medical resarch which is run by private companies is under control by the governments'. These frequent errors can cause difficulty and confusion for the reader. To progress, you need to practice forming accurate complex sentences and pay closer attention to basic grammatical rules such as pluralisation, articles, and prepositions.

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