Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

These days, many private companies investing their mony on medical research projects.some people believed that it should carried by government or companies.I strongly beleived that it is carried by governments not by individuals or any other companies.In this essay i will support my opinion with examples.

To begin with, i just say that government should tacckle these kind of authorities because,if they help to medical projects there are so much factors will decreased such as, health issues, time management and rush ended.For example in local areas if more hospital will be there the more health will be another addition, is that a certain disease will be cure by doctors so, nobody go through these sites.

secondly, in my perspective if these issues solved by governemnt nobody gain pain much more in past they get. time management is the main cause nowadays most people are in hurry they just check their patient and go to work subsequently, more hospital make people easy and relax just go there and have a treatment.

in contrast to this if these all projects handle by private company owners or people do individually it is very hard to complete that kind of project or it takes so many years .

i strongly believed that its a good development by authorit

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear preference for government funding: “I strongly believed that it is carried by governments.” You also attempt to give reasons, including wider access to hospitals and the difficulty private owners or individuals may face completing projects. However, the response only minimally addresses the question because it focuses mainly on hospitals, treatment and convenience rather than explaining who should fund medical research and why. The examples are vague, and the reasons are repeated or not clearly connected to research. The conclusion is incomplete (“a good development by authorit”), so your final position is not properly reinforced. The response is 36 words below the required minimum. To strengthen your answer, explain specific benefits of government-funded research and develop a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, with an introduction, two supporting paragraphs, a contrast paragraph and a concluding statement. Linking expressions such as “To begin with,” “secondly” and “in contrast” help signal the intended structure. However, progression is difficult to follow because several ideas are repeated, and the links between research funding, hospitals and “time management” are unclear. Some sentences run together, while the final paragraph ends abruptly, leaving the conclusion unfinished. Referencing is also unclear in phrases such as “these issues” and “these all projects.” Use one paragraph for each distinct reason, connect each reason directly to medical research, and finish with a complete conclusion.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is basic but includes some relevant terms, such as “medical research projects,” “government,” “private company” and “disease.” These help communicate the general topic and your preference. However, the range is repetitive, and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear, including “these kind of authorities,” “health will be another addition” and “nobody gain pain.” There are also spelling errors, for example “mony,” “beleived,” “tacckle” and “governemnt.” Aim to use more precise language about research funding, such as “allocate public funds,” “conduct clinical trials” and “develop treatments.” Check spelling carefully and choose phrases that express your intended meaning directly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the response includes some subordinate clauses, for example “if these issues solved by governemnt” and “if these all projects handle by private company owners.” However, these attempts are often grammatically incomplete, and errors frequently make the relationships between ideas difficult to understand. Examples include “it should carried by government,” which needs a passive verb form, and “if more hospital will be there,” where the conditional structure is not controlled. There are also problems with articles, plurals, agreement and punctuation, as in “more hospital make people easy.” Practise accurate sentence patterns first, especially passive constructions and conditional sentences, then combine ideas using clear punctuation.

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