Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Medical research is beneficial for all of us. It needs several funds for the researchers to successfully conduct a study about a certain disease and cure. This essay will thoroughly talks about who shoould really be given the opportunity to conduct a research.

The state would always have an alloted fund for these kind of medical researches. However, there are several downside of entrusting the research to the government. Example would be the issues that are circulating attached to the financial obligations and corruptions in the government. There will be a diversion of funds to other projects which will least prioritize the researches pertaining to medical matters. On the other hand, If private companies take hold of the project, it will be more costly for the public once the research succeeded to find cure for a certain sickness. One example would be if it turned to be that the private company come up with a effective medicine for a terminal disease, the organization will take advantage and monopolize the product as to gain profit from it. The common populace will have a hard time to keep up with the cost that the company will impose. The best one to carry out the analysis is the individual who has a thorough knowledge in line with medical substance, and who has enough funding to do so. I believe that an eager person who would like to provide solution to several humans and creatures who are suffering from various diseases with no cure, would have a better chance to offer a helping hand to those people who are sick, priviledged or not.

In conclusion, these type of research that includes a deep medical anlysis must be done by the right group or individuals. If it will be carried out by the right organization or person, there will be more people who will be better and cured without being taken advantage of by the imposition of costs.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Naniniwala kang dapat pangunahan ang pananaliksik ng mga indibidwal na may sapat na kaalaman at pondo, at tinatalakay mo ang mga alternatibong pamahalaan at pribadong kumpanya. May kaugnayan sa paksa ang mga alalahanin tungkol sa paglilipat ng pondo ng publiko sa ibang gamit at sa mga monopolyo ng pribadong kumpanya, at nakatutulong ang halimbawa ng gamot para ipaliwanag ang posibleng epekto nito sa mga pasyente. Gayunman, hindi gaanong napalawak ang panig na pumapabor sa mga indibidwal na mananaliksik: sinasabi mong makatutulong sa mga maysakit ang isang taong masigasig, pero hindi mo ipinapaliwanag kung paano makakakuha ang mga indibidwal ng sapat na pondo, pasilidad, o pangangasiwa. Malawak din ang tinutukoy ng konklusyon na “right group or individuals,” nang hindi nililinaw kung mga indibidwal pa rin ang mas gusto mo. Palawakin ang pangunahing paninindigang ito at suportahan ito ng tiyak na halimbawa o praktikal na paliwanag para maging malinaw ang lahat ng bahagi ng argumento mo.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

May pangkalahatang estruktura ang sagot: panimula, pangunahing talatang naghahambing sa pagpopondo ng pamahalaan at pribadong sektor bago ilahad ang pinili mong opsiyon, at konklusyon. Madaling sundan ang pangkalahatang daloy dahil sa mga panandang gaya ng “However,” “On the other hand,” at “In conclusion.” Gayunman, hindi gaanong malinaw o tila mekanikal ang ilang ugnayan. Sunod-sunod na tinatalakay ng mahabang pangunahing talata ang tatlong opsiyon nang walang magkakahiwalay na bahagi, at hindi malinaw kung indibidwal na mananaliksik o pinagmumulan ng pondo ang tinutukoy mo sa “The best one.” Hindi rin tiyak ang paninindigan mo dahil sa “right group or individuals” sa konklusyon. Gumamit ng magkakahiwalay na talata para ayusin ang mga alternatibo at ang paraang pinapaboran mo, at gawing tahasan ang mga pagtukoy para mapahusay ang daloy at pagkakaugnay-ugnay.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

Gumagamit ka ng bokabularyong may kaugnayan sa paksa, kabilang ang “financial obligations,” “monopolize,” “terminal disease,” at “imposition of costs,” at karaniwang nauunawaan ng mambabasa ang mga alalahanin mo. Sinusubukan mo ring gumamit ng mas pormal na pananalita, gaya ng “carry out the analysis.” Gayunman, hindi tumpak o hindi natural ang ilang piniling salita at kolokasyon: mas natural sabihin ang “substantial funding” kaysa “several funds,” samantalang hindi malinaw na inilalarawan ng “a certain disease and cure” ang pagsasaliksik tungkol sa isang sakit o pagbuo ng paggamot. Hindi rin tiyak ang “Medical substance” sa kontekstong ito. Lalo pang nakababawas sa kahusayan ang mga pagkakamali sa baybay gaya ng “shoould,” “priviledged,” at “anlysis.” Sikaping gumamit ng tumpak na mga kolokasyong may kaugnayan sa pananaliksik at maingat na suriin ang baybay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

Sinusubukan mong gumamit ng payak at masalimuot na mga anyo, kabilang ang mga kondisyunal na estruktura gaya ng “If private companies take hold of the project” at sugnay na panuring na nagsisimula sa “who has a thorough knowledge.” Karaniwang nauunawaan pa rin ang ibig sabihin, pero may natitira pang mga pagkakamali sa gramatika. Halimbawa, pinagsasama ng “This essay will thoroughly talks” ang mga anyo ng pandiwang hindi maaaring gamitin nang magkasama; gamitin ang “will thoroughly discuss.” Sa “there are several downside,” kailangang tumugma sa “several” ang pangmaramihang pangngalan, at kailangan ding pangmaramihan ang “these kind.” Dapat ding pagtuunan ang mga artikulo at pagbuo ng pangungusap sa “come up with a effective medicine” at “The best one to carry out the analysis is the individual.” Balikan ang pagtutugma ng simuno at pandiwa, mga artikulo, at mga padron ng pandiwa, saka suriin ang bantas at mga hangganan ng pangungusap para mas maayos mong makontrol ang mahahabang pangungusap.

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