Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

nowadays several researcher of medical thing are eranged by private companies in my praspacted this money affort by goverment

on tha one hand i think when goverment give this funded for researcher it very good for people becouse in future a number of virus will come in our world thats why if goverment affort this money .in future people get medicine chep prices thts why in my opinion i think goverment can affort funded research project it is a very good decition

on the other hand if any company give funded for medical research in future if researcher can make any medicine it will be very expensibe for people becouse company invest just for bussiness on tha other hand goverment work just for people tha have no interrest for earn thats why i think goverment should affort this investment its good for normal people

i think if goverment take this funded its benifit for normal people on tha other hand if privet company invest money it medicine will very expensive normal people can not affort thts why i think if goverment take this decition it will be beter for normal people

in conclusion nowadays several medical research projects are invest by private organization and i think goverment should be give this funded for medical researcher

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a consistent opinion that government should fund medical research, and you offer a relevant reason: publicly funded medicines may be more affordable, whereas private companies may seek profit. This addresses the central choice in the prompt. However, the response only partially develops the task: the contrast is repeated several times, while the role of individuals is not discussed and the examples remain general. The explanation about future viruses could be extended with a specific illustration of how public research benefits people. The response also contains 215 words, which is 35 words below the required minimum. To strengthen the answer, address all three funding options, explain each main reason more fully, and include a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

Your response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction to two contrasting points and a conclusion. Phrases such as “on the one hand,” “on the other hand,” and “in conclusion” help signal the intended organisation. However, progression is limited because the same affordability argument is repeated in the second body paragraph and conclusion without adding a new point. Some links are also awkward or unclear, particularly the long sentence beginning “on the other hand if any company give funded.” Use shorter sentences to separate claims and explanations, and make each paragraph serve a distinct purpose—for example, one paragraph on government funding and another comparing private and individual funding. This would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant terms, including “medical research,” “funded,” “medicine,” “expensive,” and “normal people,” so the main topic is generally understandable. However, vocabulary is limited and repetitive, especially in the repeated references to government, funding, and ordinary people. Several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to interpret, such as “eranged,” “praspacted,” “affort,” and “decition.” Some combinations are also unnatural, including “give this funded” and “take this funded.” Build a more precise range for discussing research finance and public access, and check spelling carefully. Using accurate phrases such as “allocate public funds” and “affordable treatment” would make your ideas clearer and more appropriate for an academic essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “because” and “if,” but these complex attempts are often faulty, and most sentences contain grammatical errors. Problems include missing or incorrect verbs (“it very good for people”), subject–verb agreement (“company invest”), articles and plurals (“a number of virus”), and sentence boundaries. The opening sentence is especially difficult to understand because its clauses are not formed clearly. Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, making long stretches harder to read. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with one clear subordinate clause. For example: “If the government funds research, new medicines may be more affordable.” This will help you express your reasoning without losing clarity.

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