Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In these system, a lot of nutrition describe new explanition by private companies . In my prespective, some thought that project shoukld be run by private camponies, peoples, or goverment institution medical research projects are very benifical for our country in this essay i will explain my school of thought in the topic of medical research . In this face private camponies could work in medical research . they do They best but they required a lot of money to spend on thius project . in this project they need some need to hired some trained staff that will are fully exprinced they do thir best to providing good research by corpporativeing each other in every task this private company peoples have good knowledge for in this projects when they are create any project they sell in very costly . A middle class or lower class family could not avail this benifical activities . On the other face a people componies or goverment componies when work on this project absolutily they have many invested by the goverment this institutions also hire very exprinced or talented employes , they work hard and after along of hard work they finally win in this battle or create a good project about on medical research . After completing this project they sell these project in lower price in this way they get a lot of profit and get healthy revinew . I think both are good but private companies required big amount to sucsses thier project while govermnet could provides the money for goverment componies

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the topic by comparing private companies with government-funded research and give a relevant concern: private firms may charge prices that lower-income families cannot afford. However, the response only partially answers the choice in the question. Individuals are mentioned in the opening but not discussed, and your final view that “both are good” does not clearly explain which should carry out research or how the two approaches should work together. The ideas about trained staff, government investment and lower prices are relevant, but they are asserted rather than explained with specific examples or clear reasoning. State your position directly, address all three options, and develop each main point with a concrete example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, a paragraph about private companies, a paragraph about government institutions, and a conclusion. The contrast signalled by “On the other face” also shows an effort to guide the reader. However, progression is difficult to follow because several ideas are crowded into long, loosely connected sentences, and the conclusion does not clearly follow from the comparison. Connectors such as “in this way” are used without a precise link to the preceding point, while repeated references to “this project” make relationships unclear. Use one main idea per paragraph, order supporting details logically, and use clear references and transitions to show how each point supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “medical research,” “trained staff,” “government,” and “lower price,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is limited and many spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, for example “nutrition describe new explanition,” “school of thought,” and “healthy revinew.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “win in this battle” for completing research successfully and “sell these project” for making research or treatments available. Build a more accurate set of phrases for funding, conducting research, affordability, and public benefit, and check spelling and word forms carefully. This will make your ideas clearer and more appropriate to an academic essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You try to form longer sentences and use clauses to explain reasons, as in the sentence about companies hiring trained staff. However, these attempts are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation can make the meaning hard to follow. For example, “they do They best but they required” shifts tense and has an unclear structure, while “government could provides” has incorrect verb agreement and form. Several sentences run together without clear punctuation, including the opening and the paragraph about private companies. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “which,” or “although.”

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