Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the recent time, many medical research projects are funded by private companies rathar then government sector, while some of community think that private comapnies give best material of research and get good result. I strongly believe that funding by private or individual comapnies is far better then government sector, because nowadays government sectors being dull in few departments

Firstly, in medical our society were taking money as fund raiser and developing their reaserch through the medical machine. Moreover, private companies carried out world best result with proper detailings. For example, in pandemic time there were many individual comapny who reserched on vaccines in minimal rate, whereas many of them just want to earn good amount, despite the think of poor people. In addition, some time private comapnies do better reaserch because they have wide range of funding due to that they can do best research.

Secondly, private comapnies do not have limited criteria of money, they will invest as much as they can, while in government sector they provide limited range due to that some thime it can be diffcult to carried by appropriate research. As the result, in medical search funding is more cruical then other things because scientist will not success in one reaserch they doing back to back testing before they reached to final result. For instance, medical reasearch is very important to get healthy life and for that private compines are far good then government because they have tie up with foreign companies with help of that they do research.

In conclusion, many medical research are funded by private companies because it get diffcult for government to focused on each department due to that they giving to private sector. Therefore, ordinary comapnies have tie up with few foreign medical comapnies and with help of that they do their best in medical, however, i belived that private comapnies are best for medical reasech and they have large range of funding.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear preference for private funding, stating that it is “far better” than government funding, and you support this with relevant points about investment capacity, vaccine research and international partnerships. However, the task asks whether research should be funded by private companies, individuals or government, and your response does not clearly distinguish individual funding from company funding or weigh the alternatives. Several claims are also under-developed: for example, the point that private companies can invest more is repeated, but you do not explain how this leads to better or more accessible medical outcomes. The pandemic example is relevant, though its details are unclear. Develop each reason with a specific explanation and address all funding options more directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an identifiable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs beginning “Firstly” and “Secondly”, and a conclusion. These paragraph divisions help the reader follow the broad argument. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and linking phrases sometimes connect ideas without showing their precise relationship. For instance, “As the result” introduces a point about repeated testing, but the connection to private funding is not fully explained. The conclusion also repeats the preference and funding argument rather than drawing the main reasons together. Some references, such as “they” and “that”, have unclear antecedents. Use fewer formulaic transitions and make each paragraph develop one distinct reason in a clear sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “medical research”, “vaccines”, “funding”, “scientist” and “testing”, so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “private companies”, “research” and “funding”. Frequent spelling errors such as “reaserch”, “comapnies” and “diffcult” make the writing less clear and reduce the accuracy of your vocabulary. Some combinations are also unnatural, including “proper detailings”, “limited range of money” and “do their best in medical”. Build a bank of accurate collocations for research and finance, and proofread spelling. More precise wording would help express your ideas without relying on repeated general terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, using connectors such as “because”, “while” and “whereas” to show relationships between ideas. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “government sectors being dull” lacks a finite verb, while “scientist will not success” has an incorrect verb form and number. In “many medical research are funded”, the noun phrase and verb do not agree. Punctuation and sentence boundaries also need attention, especially in the long opening sentence. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly controlled subordinate clause before adding more complexity.

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