Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

in my opinon medical research projects should be funded by governments because government works for social welfare while private companies and individuals works for their profit not for the public profit. if the research projects are funded by the government the future cost would be so accesible for the lower caste to get medical help in the future as the bars of the cost have been rising for the medical help and they can get the subbsidies too but if they gets funded by the private companies the cost would be so high that it is almost impossible for a lower class to affoard the medical help. medical help is so important because almost everybody needs it at some point of time so it is highly important that it should be funded by the government. there was a case in which a poor family needed urgent medical help they went to a private hospital in which the cost of the treatment was so high that it was next to impossible for them to affoard that so they went to a governmnet hospital where there treatment got done in such a low price so it is really needed that government should fund it

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you believe governments should fund medical research because they prioritise public welfare and can help keep treatment affordable. The comparison with private hospitals and the example of a family seeking treatment are relevant, and you explain why access matters. However, the response develops mainly one reason—cost—and does not fully explore the alternatives named in the question, particularly whether individuals should fund research or how private funding might contribute. The example is also general and its link to research funding could be made more explicit. The response is 48 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to develop your argument. Add a second distinct reason and explain it with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The reader can follow the central argument, and the ideas move from your position to affordability and then to an example. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, so the main point, supporting explanation and example are not clearly separated. Most connections rely on repeated forms of “because,” “so” and “but,” and the long sequence of clauses makes relationships between ideas harder to track. For example, the discussion of subsidies and rising medical costs runs directly into the contrast with private companies. Use separate paragraphs for your position and reasons, and for a developed example. Add clearer transitions such as “Furthermore” or “For instance,” while avoiding repeated “so.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “social welfare,” “medical help,” “private companies” and “subsidies,” so the main message is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated, especially “medical help” and “cost.” Some word choices are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “public profit” for public benefit and “the bars of the cost” for rising costs. Spelling errors—including “opinon,” “accesible” and “affoard”—also make the writing less polished. Build a wider set of precise terms for healthcare and research, and check spelling carefully. For example, use “affordable treatment” and “healthcare costs” rather than repeating broad or unclear expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences using “because,” “while” and “if,” but these structures are often difficult to control, and there are few clearly accurate sentence patterns. Subject–verb agreement is a recurring issue: “government works” is followed by “individuals works,” and “if they gets funded” should use a plural verb. The opening sentence also joins several complete ideas without clear punctuation, while the final example becomes a long run-on sentence. These errors sometimes make the relationships between points harder to follow. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them with accurate conjunctions. Check agreement, sentence boundaries and punctuation when editing.

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