Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In recent years, many medical research project are funded by private companies it has become a a substantial. i not fimrly convinced with this because it is responsiblity of government.this essay will substantiate many revlent arguments and examples.

On the one hand it is very excellent work that medical department is doing because it can discover more about bacteria and other thing but the main point is to fund them for their research instrument and worker. While it is reponsiblity of government. to illustrates the Government must fund these type of research because for their public safety.

ON the hand, the research project which should be funded by Government is nowadays funded by private companies. it is government reponsiblity but they are not funded that and now funded by private companies. Furhermore the private companies funded the project because if they find some thing special so they sell the formula to other medical companies or keep it for their own medicine use

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IN conclusion, i support that Governmet should fund for medical project because for their public as well as for the formal that they can use it instead used by private companies.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a position—that the government should fund medical research—in the introduction and conclusion, and you give a relevant concern about private firms keeping or selling discoveries for their own benefit. However, the task is only partially addressed: the reasons are brief, and the comparison with funding by individuals is not discussed. The point about public safety is asserted but not explained with a specific example or consequence, while the private-company argument needs clearer development. The response also contains 194 words, below the required 250, so there is not enough space to develop the argument fully. To strengthen the response, explain why public funding benefits society and address the roles of both private companies and individuals.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and phrases such as “On the one hand” and “In conclusion” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because the first body paragraph does not clearly establish its main point, and the second repeats that government funding is a responsibility without adding a well-organised contrast. Some linking phrases are inaccurate or incomplete, including “On the hand,” and the repeated use of “because” makes connections between ideas unclear. Paragraphing is present, but ideas within paragraphs need a clearer sequence: state one reason, explain it, and then give an example. Use references such as “this approach” only when their meaning is unmistakable.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt some topic-related vocabulary, including “medical research,” “bacteria,” “public safety,” and “formula,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling and word-choice errors strain understanding. Examples include “fimrly,” “reponsiblity,” “revlent,” and “Furhermore”; “medical department” is also unclear in this context. Several phrases are not natural collocations, such as “fund for medical project” and “formal that they can use.” Aim for accurate, specific expressions rather than adding ambitious words that are not controlled. For example, describe who funds research, what discoveries are used for, and how the public benefits, using consistent terms such as “research funding” and “medical findings.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to use both simple statements and longer clauses, for example, “because if they find some thing special so they sell the formula.” However, sentence structures are very limited overall, and frequent errors make several sentences difficult to interpret. The opening has a run-on structure: “many medical research project are funded by private companies it has become…”; it also contains agreement and article problems. Other examples include “Government must fund these type of research,” where the demonstrative and noun number do not agree, and “it is government reponsiblity,” which lacks an article and has an unclear subject. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent. Build accuracy first with complete sentences, correct subject–verb agreement, and clear clause boundaries before attempting longer structures.

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