Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

These days most of medical research projects are provied socholarships by private sectors. I realy think about is it good that way make more oppounteity to work it with government as compared individuals reson its people belive and easy to get these funds by government as to privtet sectors.

Firstly , Every medical sectors connect with government its easy too every one reach out these resouse without any douth becuse this filed very partical based . For instance alst year a us based interional group provied some funds by behalf people get it but after survery report do not be match becuse no one follow rules. Mean that if this kind of thing under government every to stak with rules and end all records have clear.So government mange all things behalf every person work on it.

However, Private companiens carried person to person funds that make be big problem not only medicles instuites also face studes as will. For example In 2000 a erup country a survery candaite which all compaines who collect funding with inloves governmemt they get results there not just only 10 percent fund used for research projects and 80 percent fundns recored did not found. Therefor a big amount of fundes miss this not be amount it inclued many students carre effect by it.

Conculsion, medical funde must be carried or get by everyone government they get by rules otherside individules peoples lose thier care becuse they not get funds.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You take a position in favour of government funding, and the response stays broadly on the topic of who should fund medical research. The body paragraphs attempt to support this view with concerns about rule-following and missing funds. However, the reasons are difficult to follow and the examples are not clearly explained: the reference to a “us based interional group” and the later “erup country” survey do not establish what happened or how this proves government funding is better. The task asks you to consider private companies, individuals or government, but individuals receive little meaningful discussion. The conclusion repeats your preference without resolving these gaps. The response is also six words below the required minimum, so it needs a little more relevant development as well as clearer support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs beginning “Firstly” and “However,” and a conclusion. These markers help the reader identify the broad stages of your argument. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and links between claims and examples are weak. For instance, the first body paragraph moves from government access to resources, to a survey, to rules and records without clearly showing how each point connects. The second paragraph’s example is similarly hard to follow. Some linking expressions, such as “Mean that” and “Therefor,” do not form clear connections, while “For instance” and “For example” introduce details that remain confusing. Use one main point per paragraph and explain each example in a clear sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “medical research projects,” “private sectors,” “funds,” “rules,” and “research projects.” This gives the reader a general sense of the subject and your preference for government involvement. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling errors or inaccurate word choices strain understanding. Examples include “provied,” “oppounteity,” “resouse,” “companiens,” and “fundns.” Some phrases are also unclear or unnatural, such as “carried person to person funds” and “fundes miss.” These problems make it difficult to understand key details, especially in the examples. Build a reliable set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations; for example, use “allocate funding” and “conduct research” accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You make some attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, using forms such as “because” and “if,” and the response includes simple statements that convey your general position. However, the range of sentence structures is very limited, and errors are frequent enough to distort meaning. For example, “I realy think about is it good that way make more oppounteity” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “if this kind of thing under government every to stak with rules” is difficult to interpret because the clause is incomplete. There are also problems with articles, agreement, verb forms and sentence boundaries, as in “every medical sectors connect.” Practise writing complete subject–verb sentences first, then combine them with accurate subordinate clauses and punctuation.

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