Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this fast forwarding time, there are many healthcare research projects are funded by the private organisations where some claim that research should be carried by the private companies,soloey or legal authorites. The essay will discuss the both view in the upcoming paragraphs before my own opinion.

On the one hand, private companies provide various benefits to the society as it contains better treatment of paitents with modern eqiupments unlike the private ones as include wastage of money and time beacause the results are quite slow with less outcomes. The private companies provide detailed recovery of individual such as various tests like blood tests, cityscan and blood pressure that assit person to about its enitre body status and become quite easy for the professionals to give a proper treatment. Moreover,the results of private institution are fast and more effective with better outcomes and the trust on the people will also become strong .

On the other hand, it can be done by the governmnet as they are also very affordable for the lower section of society as due to limited resources they are unable to pay the expensive treatments in the private compaines. Beyond this, there are no further requirement of unnecessary paper work and wastage of time because in public there is alot of paper work and unless time also.

To conculde, although there are both views on private companies on one hand there are some benfits like better treatment with modern tecnologhy but i claim that it can be done by government as it reduce the wastage of time and resouces of local people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the question by discussing private companies and government, and your conclusion gives a preference for government. However, the position is not consistently clear: the introduction says the essay will discuss “the both view” without stating your own view, and the conclusion’s claim that government reduces wasted time and resources is not clearly established in the body. The private-sector paragraph gives examples of tests and faster results, but the comparison with public provision is confusing, and the government paragraph mainly asserts affordability and paperwork concerns without explaining them. To strengthen the response, state your position clearly from the outset and develop each main reason with a clear explanation or relevant example. The discussion is relevant, but ideas remain limited and under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting different sides, and a conclusion. “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “To conclude” help signal these stages. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and some links are difficult to follow. For example, the private-company paragraph moves from treatment quality to tests and then faster results without clearly connecting these points; “unlike the private ones” also makes the comparison unclear. The conclusion introduces reduced waste of time and resources as a reason for government provision, although this has not been developed earlier. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each supporting detail explicitly to the paragraph’s main claim. This would make the overall organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to healthcare and research, including “modern equipment,” “treatment,” “resources,” and “affordable,” and some choices communicate the intended topic. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or misspelled expressions make meaning harder to understand, such as “fast forwarding time,” “detailed recovery of individual,” and “unless time.” Spelling errors including “paitents,” “governmnet,” and “tecnologhy” are noticeable. Some phrases also use unsuitable collocations, such as “the trust on the people will also become strong.” Aim for precise, natural expressions and check spelling carefully. For instance, describe research as being “conducted” and explain that it can “improve patient outcomes,” rather than relying on unclear or repeated wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some longer sentence forms and attempt to organise ideas with contrast, as in “On the one hand” and “although there are both views.” However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty, which sometimes makes relationships between ideas unclear. The opening sentence contains a broken construction: “there are many healthcare research projects are funded,” while “as it contains better treatment” has an unclear subject and agreement. Other examples include “it can be done by the government as they are” and “it reduce the wastage,” where pronoun reference and verb agreement are not controlled. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly around commas and spaces. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using clear clauses and check subject–verb agreement.

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