Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this today world,numerous medicinal initiatives are sponsored by non public enterprises. In my openion, this type of work should be provided by admanistrations or by unlisted centers because both can give justified envirinment with all desired needs and provide real plateform for publisments.

On one hand, multiple medical reserch programs are facilitaed by private sectors in private educational departments and government gives free of cost chances to perform lab work. For example, the medical labs of california are funded by both private compnies or by their government to perform diffrent medical project like the analsis of corona virus, tuborculosis perfoem by private students or government students to analyse the causes or results of these diseases, so that this lab conduct funds from private sectors or government sectors. As e result, researchers can easily finalize the casuses of viruses by using all funds that are providing by the sectors.

On the other hand, when all the reserch work done by researchers the next step is to bublish their work to check the reality about the work on the world wide stage. For instance, government vniversities and private education departmrnts give tasks to students for research to complete their studies at higher education level.Learners first complete their work and publish research articals by help of goverment journlas or private journals.As a results both deparments works on the artical and send it to other countries to confirm the positive results by paying charges and conduct report for publisments.

In conclusion, lot of medical teaching centrs are funded by private compnies.In my openion these kind of analsis should be fully funded by governments and private compnies so thal all reserch work can be done properly for better results so that economy can be stable.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a position that research should receive support from both government and private companies, and you mention funding, laboratory work and publication. These points are relevant, but the response only partly answers the choice in the question: it does not clearly compare private companies, individuals and government, and the opening also introduces “unlisted centers” without explaining what they are. The examples about California laboratories and university students remain general, and it is difficult to see how they prove which funding model is best. The conclusion repeats the preference for joint funding but does not explain why this approach is preferable. Develop a clear position on all the options and support it with a specific, explained example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “On one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion, so the reader can recognise a basic essay structure. However, progression within the paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves between private-sector funding, government opportunities, disease analysis and funding without clearly connecting these points. The second paragraph’s discussion of publishing also shifts between students, journals and international confirmation. Linking phrases such as “As a result” are attempted, but some connections are unclear or repetitive. Use one main idea per paragraph, explain how each example supports it, and make references such as “both departments” explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “medical research,” “funded,” “researchers,” “journals” and “results.” However, the range is limited and frequent spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response difficult to understand, for example “admanistrations,” “envirinment,” “plateform” and “publisments.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “free of cost chances” and “conduct funds.” These problems affect clarity, even though the general subject can usually be identified. Build a reliable set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations; for instance, describe institutions as providing “funding” or “research opportunities,” rather than using unclear phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses beginning with “when” and “so that,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in verb forms and sentence construction occur frequently, as in “when all the reserch work done by researchers,” where a finite verb is missing, and “both deparments works,” where the subject and verb do not agree. The opening sentence also has faulty structure, making the relationship between the proposed funders and the research unclear. Punctuation and spacing are inconsistent, particularly around sentence boundaries. Practise forming complete clauses with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement and tense. Shorter, accurate sentences would make your ideas easier to follow while you develop more complex structures.

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