Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO₂) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

"The line chart shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in United kingdom,Sweden and Italy and portugal between 1967 and 2007.Overall,it is evident that the united kindgom recorded the highest figure,whereas the portugal had the lowest figure.This figure number to 12 toones.Looking at the details the united kindgom recorded the 11tonnes.Meanwhile,the sweden 10toones,Additionally,the sweden had approximately 8tonnes.In contrast,italy accounted for 6 tonnes and 4 tonnes.Finally the portugal was 2 toones.In this graph the sweden values were increasing and then gradully immediately.however, the values of italy was decreased,then gradually increased after some times.Morever, values of portugal were decreased.And then increased after some times.Finally,these are the different changes on which average carbon dioxide emissions per person shown in different countries along with United kingdom,Sweden,Italy and Portugal present between 1967 and 2007.The united kindgom has recorded the highest figure,which reaching 12 tonnes per person.And the portugal has recorded the lowest figures 2toones.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the countries and period, and your overview correctly notes that the UK was generally highest while Portugal began lowest. However, the report only partially summarises the graph: several figures are inaccurate or unclear, and the trends are sometimes reversed. For example, the UK fell from about 11 to 9 tonnes, not to 12; Portugal rose from roughly 1 to 5 tonnes rather than decreasing; and Italy increased, then levelled off, rather than decreasing before rising. Sweden peaked in 1977 and then declined, which your description only partly captures. The response also repeats the highest/lowest point instead of selecting further key comparisons. The required minimum of 150 words is not met. Organise the report around an accurate overview and the main contrasting trends.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction and an overview before moving to details. Linking expressions such as “Meanwhile,” “In contrast,” and “Finally” show awareness of how to connect information. However, the ideas do not progress clearly: figures from different years are listed without identifying the years, and the sequence “the Sweden had approximately 8 tonnes” is difficult to place. The final sentences repeat the claim that the UK was highest and Portugal lowest, while several transitions connect statements that do not form a clear comparison. Paragraphing would help separate the overview from the detailed trends. Group the countries by pattern and use explicit time references so readers can follow changes across the period.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “average carbon dioxide emissions,” “recorded,” “figure,” and “in contrast,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the report less clear, such as “toones,” “gradully immediately,” and “different changes.” Country names are also inconsistently capitalised and spelled (“united kindgom,” “portugal”). Some phrases are unnatural, including “This figure number to 12 tonnes” and “the Portugal had the lowest figure.” Use precise language for graph trends, such as “rose,” “declined,” “peaked,” and “remained stable,” and avoid repeating “figure” when a more specific noun or verb is available. Check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts a few longer sentences, including one beginning “whereas” and another using “which,” but most structures are simple or incomplete, and errors are frequent enough to make some relationships difficult to understand. Examples include “the Sweden values were increasing,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “the values of italy was decreased,” which has faulty agreement and verb construction. Articles and sentence boundaries are also problematic in phrases such as “the portugal” and in the run-on opening, “United kingdom,Sweden and Italy and portugal between 1967 and 2007.Overall.” Use a consistent past tense for the historical data, form complete sentences, and check subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation. A few accurate complex sentences would also help express comparisons more clearly.

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