Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The graph illustrates average carbon dioxide emissions per person from 1967 to 2007, in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal.
It is clear that Italy and Portugal' s emissions saw an upward trend over the period shown, while the carbon dioxide emissions in United Kingdom and Sweden dropped. Besides, a much larger change of Italy and Portugal in emissions in comparison with United Kingdom and Sweden.
In 1967, the average carbon dioxide emissions per person in Portugal was 1.7 approximately, making the city the lowest emission among the four cities. The figures of Italy and Sweden were about 4.1 and 8.6 respectively, while the emission of United Kingdom was highest at around 10.9. After two decades from 1967, Italy and Portugal experienced an upward trend to 6.4 and 3.7 respectively, while little progress made in United Kingdom whose emissions had declined slightly. Sweden dropped dramatically after it jumped to peak at 10.1 in 1977. Between 1987 and 2007, the average carbon dioxide emissions per person in Italy and Portugal still remained sustained growth. The emission per person in Sweden experienced a significant fall ended at 5.7, and compared with United Kingdom just saw minor drop, with 8.4 emission in 2007.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
这篇作文涵盖了题目要求的所有要点,识别出了主要趋势并对比了四个国家的数据。文章概述清晰,突出了各国不同的发展路径。然而,数据描述中存在一些不准确之处;例如,学生将国家称为 'cities',这在事实层面是错误的。此外,趋势描述可以更精确,特别是在提及具体年份时。虽然抓住了主要特征,但如果想获得更高的分数,对数据点的分析需要更加连贯。总体而言,这篇作文有效地总结了图表中的信息。
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
文章逻辑组织严密,包含清晰的引言、主体段落和趋势总结。使用了 'while'、'in comparison with' 和 'after two decades' 等衔接词来连接观点。不过,部分过渡显得有些生硬,指代有时不够明确,例如 'a much larger change of Italy and Portugal in emissions' 这一短语。段落划分合理,将概述与详细的数据分析分离开来。观点推进总体清晰,但句子间的连贯性仍有提升空间,以增强可读性。
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
词汇范围足以完成任务,尝试使用了 'upward trend'、'dropped dramatically' 和 'sustained growth' 等描述性语言。但也存在一些选词错误,例如将国家称为 'cities',以及 'little progress made in United Kingdom' 这种表达较为生硬。使用 'sustained growth' 是尝试使用更高级词汇的一个好例子。虽然词汇量足以表达含义,但缺乏获得更高分数所需的精确度和灵活性。整篇文章的拼写基本准确。
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
学生混合使用了简单句和复杂句。文中存在一些语法错误,例如冠词缺失('in United Kingdom')、介词使用不当以及句式构建生硬('the average carbon dioxide emissions per person in Portugal was 1.7 approximately')。虽然这些错误不影响理解,但出现频率较高,限制了分数的提升。标点符号控制得不错,但句式结构仍需进一步多样化和优化,以展现出更高的语法能力。
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