Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO₂) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph compares the Carbon dioxide emission per person form the year 1967 to 2007

in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal

In the year 1967 the UK had recorded the highest amount of Carbon emission per person while Portugal had the lowest. even though the UK had the had had the highest record of 10.5 tonnes of carbon emission in 1967 it has had stead decline since then with in 1987 has 10 tonnes of carbon emission which declined to 9 tonnes in 2007.

Sweden started off at around 8.2 tonnes of emission in 1967 with a sharp incline till 1977 with carbon emission reaching up to 10.1 tonnes with sharp decline till 1987 which was a total of 7 tonnes of carbon emission then in a steady decline till 2007 in which it had a emission of 5 tonnes.

While Portugal that started with the lowest had a steady incline till 1987 which rose emssion to 3.5 tonnes with a fast incline after that till 1997 at 5 tonnes which then remind condtsnt after that

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main trends and provided data points for the four countries. However, the response lacks a clear overview paragraph, which is essential for a Band 6 or higher. While you mention the UK and Portugal, you miss the opportunity to synthesize the overall trends (e.g., the general decline in the UK and Sweden versus the upward trend in Portugal and Italy). Additionally, some data points are slightly inaccurate or confusingly phrased, such as the description of Sweden's decline. To improve, ensure you include a summary paragraph immediately after the introduction that highlights the most significant differences and trends across the entire period.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite limited and sometimes mechanical. Phrases like 'even though' and 'while' are used, but the transition between sentences is often abrupt. The lack of an overview makes the logical progression feel disjointed. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast,' 'Furthermore,' 'Subsequently') to connect your ideas more fluidly and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that relates back to the main trends.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision required for higher bands. You rely on repetitive phrasing such as 'carbon emission' and 'decline.' There are also some spelling errors ('emssion', 'remind condtsnt') and awkward collocations ('had the had had'). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' (e.g., 'fluctuated,' 'surged,' 'plummeted') and ensure you are using technical terms accurately. Proofreading for basic spelling errors is also essential to avoid distracting the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include missing articles ('in the year 1967'), incorrect verb tenses ('it has had stead decline'), and punctuation errors. The sentence structure in the second paragraph is particularly repetitive and contains several errors in subject-verb agreement. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensure that your verb tenses are consistent when describing past data. Reducing the number of run-on sentences will also significantly improve the readability of your writing.

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