Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Yes, the graph is given here and showing then average carbon dioxide (CO2) of emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal and the graph is between 1967 and 2007
here the information of average carbon dioxide (CO2), and the information about united kingdom, it is between 10 to 12 in 1967 in UK for per person and it goes to 8 to 10in 2007 for per person in the UK
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the content is severely underdeveloped. You have only mentioned the United Kingdom and provided very limited data points. There is no attempt to summarize the main trends for all four countries (Sweden, Italy, and Portugal are ignored) or to make the required comparisons. The response does not provide an overview of the data, which is essential for an Academic Task 1 report. To improve, you must cover all data points provided in the graph and ensure you write a full report that exceeds the minimum length.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks a logical structure. It is composed of two very short, fragmented paragraphs that do not follow the standard format of an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, and the progression of information is disjointed. The opening sentence is repetitive and does not effectively introduce the graph. To improve, you should organize your report into clear paragraphs: an introduction, a clear overview of the main trends, and specific body paragraphs that group data logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. You use the phrase 'average carbon dioxide (CO2) of emissions' and 'per person' multiple times, which shows a lack of lexical variety. There is no attempt to use academic vocabulary related to data description (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'declined', 'remained stable', 'peaked'). The language is limited to simple descriptive structures. To improve, you should learn and apply topic-specific vocabulary for describing trends and changes in data, and avoid repeating the same phrases throughout your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammar is weak, with frequent errors that impede clarity. Examples include 'the graph is given here and showing then average', which is grammatically incorrect, and 'it goes to 8 to 10in 2007', which lacks proper sentence structure and spacing. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent. The response relies on simple, poorly constructed sentences. To improve, you need to focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and using a wider range of grammatical structures such as complex sentences to describe the data more accurately.
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