Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given graph illustrate the information about the average emission of carbon dioxide that produced by per persons in different countries during 1967 to 2007.
The image display the comparison of people in 1967 to 2007, in this period of time people releasing carbon dioxide in different countries like United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal, in which country the emission of carbon dioxide high and low.
Initially, we discuss the image design that compare increasing and decreasing of public who produce carbon dioxide. In 1967, Portugal and Italy produce large amount of carbon dioxide as compared to 2007, the average percentage is demonstrate in this period is United Kingdom, but the air polution decreased in Sweden due to the responsible public. Although, the this graph shows the average emission of carbon dioxide in this whole time in different countries that is mentioned above. These are the main highlights of this diagrams.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to adequately address the task requirements. While it mentions the countries and the timeframe, it does not provide a clear summary of the main features or trends shown in the graph. The data provided is inaccurate and vague; for example, the claim that 'Portugal and Italy produce large amount of carbon dioxide as compared to 2007' is not supported by the data, which shows a rise in emissions for these countries. The response lacks a clear overview and fails to make meaningful comparisons between the countries, which is essential for an Academic Task 1 report.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. The introduction is repetitive, and the body paragraphs do not follow a clear structure. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and often incorrect way, such as the misuse of 'Although' at the beginning of a sentence that does not contain a contrast. Referencing is unclear, and the connection between the sentences is often disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended meaning of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'the average emission of carbon dioxide that produced by per persons' and 'the air polution decreased'. The student relies on basic vocabulary and struggles to use terminology appropriate for describing data, such as 'increasing and decreasing of public' instead of referring to emission levels. These errors occasionally impede communication, as the intended meaning is sometimes obscured by the poor choice of words.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the writing. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('The given graph illustrate', 'The image display'), article usage, and sentence structure. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, such as 'the average percentage is demonstrate in this period is United Kingdom'. The majority of sentences contain errors, and the lack of control over basic grammar significantly hinders the overall quality of the response.
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