Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
the assigned line graph delineates information regarding that the shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the united kingdom , Sweden , Italy, and Portugal from 1967 and 2007.
overall, it is evident that the united kingdom are decline and Sweden an upward trend end join in Portugal and Italy is also upward trend and Portugal also.
In 1967, Portugal per person carbon dioxide emissions an upward trend approximately 5 and stop . and Italy is also upward trend and going to the 6 turn and steadily grew and stop them 7.
Sweden and united kingdom , Sweden is 8 is growly upward and approximately down and stop them 5. united kingdom is 11 slow and slightly down and stop them 8.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have attempted to identify some trends, the analysis is superficial and lacks the necessary detail to fully address the task. You have not provided a clear overview of the main features, and the data points mentioned are often inaccurate or unclear (e.g., 'stop them 7'). To improve, you must ensure you cover all countries mentioned and provide a more comprehensive summary of the trends, including specific data points and comparisons between the countries over the 40-year period.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. There is no clear paragraphing, and the progression of ideas is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and often misused, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the four countries. For example, the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is abrupt. To improve, you should organize your response into a clear introduction, an overview paragraph, and two body paragraphs that group the countries logically, using linking words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'similarly' to connect your ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'upward trend' and 'down' throughout the text. There are also significant issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'stop them 7' and 'growly upward', which are not standard English. To achieve a higher band score, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a sharp decline', and ensure that your word choices are contextually appropriate for an academic report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the united kingdom are decline'), incorrect tense usage, and fragmented sentences. The sentence structures are simple and often lack the necessary complexity required for an academic task. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and using correct prepositions and articles. You should also practice combining simple sentences into more complex structures using relative clauses or conjunctions.
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