Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The graph shows the average of caron doxide per person in different countries. Between 1967 to 2007
However,We are provided the information of peoples of sweden,Italy,Uk,and portugal to note ratio.
Moreover, carbon dioxide become a huge issue now a days. Carbon dioxide produce by cars humans which cause a lot of problems. Carbon dioxide is reduce by trees, but sadly people do not plant trees in their neibourhood. we have to plant a lot trees. However, it has been seen that their is huge growth of emission in all these countries like portugal,italy,sweden except uk. United kingdom slight decrease in emission.In 1977 uk maintain their ratio, Sweden have huge decrease in carbon dioxide in between 1977 to1987, italy have a little growth till 1997. Portugal have massive changes untill 1997.It has been seen that there is decrease of carbon dioxide in uk. Sweden graph come down and iltaly maintain, portugal also almost remain same.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the requirements of an Academic Task 1 report. A significant portion of the text is dedicated to irrelevant personal opinions about carbon dioxide, trees, and environmental issues, which are not present in the graph. While the student identifies some trends, the analysis is inaccurate and lacks a clear overview. The report does not effectively select and report the main features or make meaningful comparisons between the four countries. The inclusion of non-task-related content significantly detracts from the overall task achievement, resulting in a low score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The response lacks logical organization and progression. The paragraphing is ineffective, and the transition between ideas is disjointed. Cohesive devices are used mechanically or incorrectly, such as the misuse of 'However' and 'Moreover' at the start of sentences where they do not logically connect the preceding information. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the trends being described. The overall structure is fragmented, and there is no clear logical flow from the introduction to the body of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'caron doxide', 'neibourhood', and 'iltaly'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends accurately; for instance, the student uses 'huge growth' and 'massive changes' repeatedly rather than precise terminology like 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'declined'. The lack of control over word choice and the presence of numerous spelling mistakes impede the clarity of the report, limiting the score to the lower end of the scale.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'carbon dioxide produce'), missing articles, and incorrect tense usage. Sentence structures are largely simple and often fragmented. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after commas and periods. The lack of complex sentence structures and the high frequency of basic errors indicate a limited command of grammar, preventing the response from reaching a higher band score.
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