Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
This charts illustrates us about the emission of Carbon dioxide by per person from 1967 to 2007 this picture tell us in different countries how many metric tons emission of carbon dioxide
This diagram tell us about the emission of carbon dioxide in such countries as well as United kingdom , Sweden,Italy , and Portugal it also tell the years in which most of carbon dioxide emission from 1967 to 2007.
In this picture we can clearly see that the emission of carbon dioxide in such countries most of carbon dioxide is emission by Italy .The chart value is increase year by year most of emission is in 1967 in UK by per person this chart tell us first it was on 2 persent then reached on 4 most of emission is on 4 persent then 6 to 8 then 12
Overall the UK had the highest per capita emission of carbon dioxide in 1967 but showed a gradual decline by 2007
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. The description of the trends is confusing and contains factual errors, such as claiming Italy had the highest emissions throughout the period, which contradicts the provided graph. The overview is extremely brief and lacks the necessary detail to highlight the main features or significant trends. The response focuses on repetitive, unclear descriptions of individual data points rather than synthesizing the information. To improve, you must focus on identifying the overall trends (e.g., the decline in UK/Sweden emissions versus the increase in Portugal/Italy) and support these with accurate data points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks logical organization and progression. The paragraphs are disjointed, and the ideas are presented in a repetitive, circular manner. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences or ideas effectively. For example, the transition between the introduction and the body is abrupt, and the use of 'this picture' and 'this chart' is repetitive and informal. The structure does not facilitate a clear flow of information, making it difficult for the reader to follow the analysis of the graph. Improving the use of linking words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'subsequently' would help create a more coherent structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic phrases like 'this chart tells us' and 'emission of carbon dioxide'. There is a lack of variety in reporting verbs and descriptive language. Furthermore, there are errors in word choice and terminology, such as using 'persent' instead of 'metric tons' or 'units'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or comparisons effectively. To achieve a higher band, you should incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', or 'a significant decrease'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('This charts illustrates', 'This diagram tell'), incorrect word order, and missing articles. The sentence structures are simple and often fragmented, lacking the complexity required for higher bands. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and improper capitalization. The misuse of basic verb tenses and the inability to construct clear, error-free sentences significantly impact the clarity of the report. Focusing on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and correct tense usage is essential for improvement.
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