Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The graph below shows the average of carbon dioxide in four different countries United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal emission per person during the period 1967 and 2007. In these years the carbon dioxide up and down in these countries.
In the graph we saw the average of carbon dioxide emission per person in addition to, the carbon dioxide in matric tonnes the United Kingdom 1967 the matric tonnes decreased every year after the country of Sweden 1967 when started after ten year in 1977 was increased and after that it was continue decreased and furthermore, at the ending point of Sweden and the Portugal stoped the same point in 2007. The Italy the average of the carbon dioxide emission increased every year at the end of 2007.
In the conclusion the average of carbon dioxide per person of each four countries the people of United Kingdom and Sweden the average decreased every year and than the Italy and Portugal increase every year of the average of the carbon dioxide.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. While it mentions the four countries, the description of trends is confusing and often factually incorrect based on the provided graph. For example, stating that Sweden 'increased' after 1977 and then 'continued decreased' is difficult to follow, and the claim that Italy increased 'every year' is a broad generalization that lacks specific data points. The response lacks a clear overview of the main trends, such as the overall decline in the UK and Sweden versus the growth in Italy and Portugal. Consequently, the information is not well-selected or reported, leading to a low band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow is severely hampered by poor sentence structure and a lack of cohesive devices. Transitions such as 'in addition to' and 'furthermore' are used incorrectly, creating confusion rather than linking ideas. The progression of information is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between countries. Referencing is often unclear, particularly when discussing the trends of Sweden and Portugal. The overall arrangement lacks the necessary structure to present the data in a coherent manner.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There is a frequent misuse of terminology, such as 'matric tonnes' (likely intended to be 'metric tonnes') and 'ending point'. The student struggles to use precise language to describe trends, relying on basic phrases like 'up and down' or 'increased every year'. There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary suitable for describing graphs, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable'. The errors in word choice and spelling significantly impede the clarity of the report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that make it difficult to understand the intended meaning. Sentence structures are often fragmented or run-on, such as 'In the graph we saw the average of carbon dioxide emission per person in addition to, the carbon dioxide in matric tonnes the United Kingdom 1967 the matric tonnes decreased every year'. There is a lack of control over basic syntax, verb tenses, and prepositions. Complex sentence structures are absent, and the errors are so pervasive that they frequently distort the meaning of the report.
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