Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO₂) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

the line grah illustrates the amount of carbon dioxide emissions per individual in four different conturies between the year 1967 and 2007 .

Overall , in 1967 the emissions of carbon in uk and sweden are on rise while in portugal its below 2 as compared to italy over 4

However in uk and sweden the emissions deacreased over the period given . while in italy and sweden it slightly rose . At the start the emissions in uk are on top in middle the emissions in sweden is on top at the end the emissions in italy and portugal is on rise .

With regard to the amount of emissions of carbon in uk it began at around 11 before falling drameticallly it peaked at12 at the end it reached to about 9 in 2007 . like wise , in sweden 9 emissions per person in starting year in middle it peaked 11 emissions before falling to 5 emissions

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the task by summarizing the main features of the graph showing CO2 emissions in four countries. However, the interpretation of the data contains significant inaccuracies and contradictions. For example, the student writes that UK emissions 'peaked at 12 at the end it reached to about 9', and later states that Sweden fell to 5 emissions after peaking at 11, but the overall tracking of trends is very confusing. There is a lack of clear, accurate data reporting, and comparisons are inconsistently made. Key features such as overall downward trends for the UK and Sweden versus upward trends for Portugal and Italy are partially touched upon but poorly supported with precise figures, pulling the score down to Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organization of the response is severely hindered by erratic spacing, fragmented sentences, and a complete absence of standard paragraph structure. Ideas are jumbled together without logical progression. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with repetitive transitional phrases like 'at the start', 'in middle', and 'at the end' used mechanically rather than effectively. The referencing between countries and their respective emission figures is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. Overall, the coherence and cohesion of the text reflect Band 4.0 characteristics.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'grah' instead of graph, 'conturies' instead of countries, and 'drameticallly' instead of dramatically. The student attempts some less common vocabulary related to data trends, but these attempts are marred by poor word choice and inaccuracy, such as 'emissions of carbon in uk and sweden are on rise'. The limited range of vocabulary is barely adequate to communicate the task requirements, aligning with a Band 5.0 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or poorly constructed attempts at complex forms that fail due to missing punctuation, absent capitalization, and grammatical inaccuracies. There are frequent run-on sentences and punctuation errors, such as missing periods and commas, which impede reading flow. Examples include 'while in italy and sweden it slightly rose' and 'like wise , in sweden 9 emissions per person in starting year'. While some basic clauses are understandable, the density of errors places this firmly at Band 4.0.

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