Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The provided graph illustrates how much average carbon dioxide emission was made by per person in different four countries from 1967 to 2007.
Overall,it is evident that carbon emissions by per person increased in Italy and Portugal while decreasing presentation can be seen in case of United KIngdom and Sweden.
On having a cursory glance at line graph,it is lucid that the average CO2 was around 11 tonnes in United kingdom considered as the highest figure in 1967.Another considerable figure is sweden which was almost 8 tonnes in same time period while Italy and Portugal accounting for the least figure in 1967.However,in 1977,Sweden,Italy and Portugal increasing their carbon emission which was
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is severely incomplete, cutting off mid-sentence at '...Sweden, Italy and Portugal increasing their carbon emission which was'. It also falls well short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 111 words. Consequently, the task cannot be fully addressed. While the writer attempts an overview and mentions some initial figures (e.g., the United Kingdom starting at around 11 tonnes in 1967), the abrupt ending prevents the proper reporting of main features and comparisons across the full timeframe. Because the length requirement is not met and the response is unfinished, a low score is warranted under the descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text attempts a standard academic structure with an introductory sentence and a clear overview ('Overall, it is evident that...'). Paragraphing is initiated properly. However, due to the premature cutoff of the text, logical progression cannot be fully evaluated. Cohesive devices used in the opening segments are generally functional, but the abrupt ending disrupts any overall textual flow. Referencing is occasionally awkward, such as 'Another considerable figure is sweden', where the country name is incorrectly substituted for the metric value.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student attempts some task-specific vocabulary such as 'carbon emissions', 'average', and 'figure'. However, word choice and collocations are frequently unnatural or inaccurate, as seen in phrases like 'how much average carbon dioxide emission was made by per person' and 'decreasing presentation can be seen'. There are also basic typographical and formatting issues, such as missing spaces after commas ('glance at line graph,it is lucid') and capitalization errors ('UKIngdom', 'sweden'). The vocabulary range remains limited and repetitive.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The writing shows a limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple or awkwardly constructed complex clauses. There are noticeable grammatical errors throughout, including prepositional misuse ('by per person') and incomplete verb phrases ('Sweden, Italy and Portugal increasing their carbon emission which was'). Punctuation and spacing errors are frequent. Because the text ends mid-sentence, it lacks grammatical closure, significantly impacting overall accuracy and readability.
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