Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The rendered line graph illustrates the information about the average carbon dioxide emissions per individuaal in the different United Kingdom,Sweden,Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
Overall, the maximum number of person take place in carbon dioxide emission from United kingdom,yet ll other diggerent nations contained the minimum number of emission of carbon dioxide in given time period
In the terms of carbon dioxide emission , it has been perceived that in 1967, the Portugaal contined the 1 metric tonnes whereas in next year , there is rapidly increse in the ratio.However, Sweden showed that 10 metric tonnes people contained the carbon dioxide in 1977. Moreover, in later year, United kingdom was on the top but suddenly in fell down and have the 9 metric tonnes in same year.
With regards to the rest of descriptions, it is crystal clear that in 1787, Italy have 7 metric tonnes human being involved in carbon dioxide emission but gradually it rise up aand showed the 7.5 metic tonnes in 2007. Apart from this sweden consisted the 7 metric tonnes carbon dioxide then in end it quickly fell down and reached at 5 metric tonnes. Portugal as well as sweden contain the same number of metric tonnes in 2007.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response attempts to cover the main features of the line graph showing carbon dioxide emissions for the four countries between 1967 and 2007. However, the task achievement is significantly hindered by confusion regarding data interpretation, where the student refers to 'metric tonnes of human beings' rather than emissions per person. While an overview is attempted, it is awkwardly phrased and lacks clarity. Some data points are mentioned, such as the UK starting highest and Portugal increasing over time, but the overall reporting of figures contains numerous inaccuracies and misreadings of the chart. Consequently, the response addresses the task only partially and the key features are not adequately or accurately presented.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text is divided into four paragraphs, including an introduction and an overview, which shows an awareness of standard structure for Academic Task 1. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by confusing phrasing and poor cohesion. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, leading to a disjointed flow of ideas. For instance, transitional phrases like 'With regards to the rest of descriptions' feel mechanical and unnatural. Referencing between sentences is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of data comparisons across the four nations.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The lexical range is extremely limited and heavily restricted by frequent errors in word choice, spelling, and collocation. Examples of inappropriate vocabulary include spelling mistakes like 'individuaal', 'diggerent', 'Portugaal', and 'increse'. Furthermore, the misuse of lexical items, such as stating that 'people contained the carbon dioxide' or referring to 'human being involved in carbon dioxide emission', severely distorts the intended meaning and causes confusion. The vocabulary is inadequate for a clear discussion of statistical data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that are marred by frequent, intrusive errors. There are numerous basic mistakes involving subject-verb agreement, verb tenses, and prepositions, such as 'the maximum number of person take place' and 'in next year, there is rapidly increse'. Punctuation and sentence structures are often faulty, leading to many sentences where meaning is obscured. Grammatical control is weak throughout the entire response.
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