Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO₂) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The Below line Graph shows the average co2 emissions per people in the united kingdom,sweden,italy and portugal between 1967 and 2007.

In this graph we clearly seen the blow down of united kingdom percentage in every 10 year of gap furthermore if we are talking about sweden firstly they rise up in the intital years then they also decreases in every 10 year of gap going forward italy rise up in the line graph and they increases the emissions till 2007 last but not least portugal also do the same they also increases as the year changes the percentage also rise up in every 10 year.

if we carefully see the line graph we have seen that the percentage of sweden and portugal will collided in 2007 which means the emission average of per people were almost same in 2007 for both of the two countries which is a positive sign as well for both of the countries

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to address the task by describing the overall trends of the four countries shown in the graph. However, the response lacks specific data points or figures, relying instead on vague descriptions like 'percentage' (even though the graph measures metric tonnes of CO2 emissions). Furthermore, the overview is missing, and the conclusion regarding Sweden and Portugal colliding in 2007 is inaccurate based on the visual data (Portugal is at 5.4 and Sweden at 5.4, which do meet, but the interpretation of this as a 'positive sign' moves away from objective reporting of data). Due to the lack of clear data selection and an appropriate overview, this meets the criteria for Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is written as a single dense paragraph, completely lacking appropriate paragraphing. Cohesive devices are extremely basic and repetitive, such as 'furthermore', 'going forward', and 'last but not least', leading to run-on sentences. There is no clear logical progression or separation of introduction, body features, and overview. Referencing is also somewhat confusing, as seen in the phrase 'both of the two countries' repeated multiple times. These organizational and cohesive shortcomings place the response firmly at Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and often inaccurate. The student repeatedly refers to emissions as 'percentage' rather than metric tonnes, and uses colloquial or imprecise phrases like 'blow down', 'rise up', and 'collided'. Word choice is frequently awkward, such as 'average co2 emissions per people'. There is no evidence of less common lexical items used with control. However, the meaning is generally comprehensible despite the limitations, which aligns with Band 4.5, rounded to Band 4.0 or 5.0; given the persistent lexical inaccuracies and strain on the reader, a Band 4.0 is appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is severely limited. The text consists largely of long, run-on sentences joined by commas or weak conjunctions without proper subordination or punctuation (e.g., 'In this graph we clearly seen the blow down...'). There are frequent errors in verb forms ('we clearly seen', 'they also increases'), capitalization ('united kingdom,sweden,italy and portugal'), and sentence boundaries. Complex structures are attempted but are consistently faulty. Due to the high frequency of basic grammatical errors that impede smooth reading, the response corresponds to Band 4.0.

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