Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO₂) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

According to the graph we can decribe the emmissions of carbon dioxide (CO2) to different countries such that United kingdom,sweden, Italy and portugal between 1967 and 2007.

In my oppinon,Here in the graph Carbon dioxide Emissions are differents such as in 1967 carbon dioxide is stable the his going to decrese in 2007, Carbon dioxide in Sweden firstly boost in 1977 then he was going to decrease in 1987, 1997 and 2007. Carbon dioxide in Italy firstly boost in 1977 and boost again in 1987 and 1997 butt same emmision in 1997 and 2007.Carbon Dioxide in portugal boost in 1977, 1987,1997 and 2007.

Carbon Dioxide gass emmissions was very comman issuse in that countries like United kingdom,Sweden,Italy and Portugal.Carbon Dioxide emmissions according to the Graph in United Kingdom was stable till 1977 and then he decrease in 1987,1997 and 2007.In sweden carbon dioxide emmission was raise in 1977 the he came back to decreases in 1987,1997 and 2007.In Italy carbon dioxide emmisions was rase in 1977,1987,1997 and in 1997 & 2007 carbon dioxide emmissions are samed. So Carbon dioxide emmissions was very highly boost in Portugal as compared to others countries.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The student attempts to address the task by mentioning the countries and certain trends, but the response suffers from severe flaws in content selection and interpretation. For instance, the student states that carbon dioxide in Portugal experienced a high boost across all years, which is accurate, but the overall summarization is heavily repetitive and conversational ('In my oppinon...'). Key data points are often generalised vaguely or misreported, such as repetitive and confusing phrasing regarding whether emissions increased or decreased. Furthermore, the inclusion of personal commentary ('In my oppinon') violates the neutral reporting style required for Academic Task 1. Consequently, the response falls into the lower bands for Task Achievement, specifically matching Band 4.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The organization of the essay is weak. The text is split into three short paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is highly repetitive and lacks logical sequencing. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, relying on rudimentary and repetitive conjunctions and connectors (e.g., 'then he was going to', 'butt same emmision'). Paragraphing is poorly utilized, as the second and third paragraphs restate similar information without clear distinction between countries or timeframes. Referencing pronouns like 'he' are used incorrectly for inanimate subjects such as carbon dioxide emissions. Overall, the arrangement lacks a clear overall progression, aligning with Band 4.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling mistakes throughout the text (e.g., 'emmissions', 'decribe', 'oppinon', 'differents', 'decrese', 'butt', 'emmision', 'gass', 'comman', 'issuse', 'rase', 'samed'). The student attempts less common vocabulary such as 'stable' and 'boost', but these are used inaccurately or repetitively. There is a lack of control over word formation and spelling, and vocabulary is insufficient to allow for precision. These persistent lexical errors and limited range place this response firmly at Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex structures. There are frequent, heavy grammatical errors that often impede understanding, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('carbon dioxide is stable the his going to decrese', 'carbon dioxide emmissions are samed'), incorrect pronoun usage ('then he came back'), and poor punctuation and capitalization. Complex sentences are rarely successful, and basic grammatical rules are frequently broken. This level of grammatical control corresponds to Band 4.

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