Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The bar graph compares the average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the UK, Sweden, Italy & Portugal between 1967 & 2007.
It is clear that the proportion of the carbon dioxide emission by per person increased in each countries over the period shown. Overall a much larger number of UK and Swedwn were emissed carbon dioxide most at 1967 i.e 11 & 9 in comparision with Italy & Portugal i.e 4 & 1 were not the fastest growned that year.
In 1977, the proportion of per person emissed CO2 of UK & Swedwn started felling down 11 & 9. However the Italy & Portugal were slightly increased for next 3 years. In other hand the UK & Sweden slightly felling down for next 3 years.
By the year 2007, the number of average carbon dioxide emmised by per person of UK & Sweden reached their lowest which was about 8.5 & 5.5. But the number of average carbon dioxide emmised by per person in Italy & Portugal were reached their highest which was about 8.8 & 5.5.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by discussing the four countries over the given time period. However, there are significant flaws in task completion. Firstly, the student misidentifies the chart type in the opening sentence, calling it a 'bar graph' instead of a line graph. Furthermore, the reporting of data is highly inaccurate and confused; for instance, stating that UK and Sweden emissions 'reached their lowest which was about 8.5 & 5.5' in 2007 when they actually declined from much higher starting points, and confusing trends for Italy and Portugal. The overview lacks clarity and fails to effectively capture the main overall trends, such as the general decrease in the UK and Sweden versus the steady increase in Italy and Portugal. Because of these data misreadings and unclear summaries, the response falls into Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is divided into four paragraphs, showing an attempt at logical organisation with an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. However, overall progression is hindered by confusing transitions and mechanical cohesive devices like 'In 1977', 'However', and 'In other hand'. Paragraphing is visibly attempted, but the internal cohesion of sentences is frequently disrupted by poor referencing and unclear connections between clauses. For instance, sentences such as 'However the Italy & Portugal were slightly increased for next 3 years' demonstrate clumsy structural linking. Consequently, the organization feels disjointed, aligning with Band 5 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The student's vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms and phrases like 'average carbon dioxide emissions', 'increased', and 'decreased' (or misformed variations like 'felling down' and 'growned'). There are frequent word-choice errors and non-standard collocations, such as 'emissed carbon dioxide', 'carbon dioxide emmised by per person', and 'growned that year'. These errors occasionally impede communication, requiring the reader to guess the intended meaning. The range is minimally adequate for addressing the topic, but the frequent lexical errors restrict the score to Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatically, the response demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, with frequent and pervasive errors. Simple sentence attempts often contain severe structural flaws, and attempts at complex or passive constructions result in ungrammatical forms such as 'a much larger number of UK and Swedwn were emissed carbon dioxide most at 1967' and 'the proportion of per person emissed CO2 of UK & Swedwn started felling down'. Punctuation and word forms are weak throughout. Due to the high frequency of grammatical errors that regularly cause strain and miscommunication, the response achieves Band 4.
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