Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The graph illistration average carbon dioxide(CO2) emissions per person in the united Kingdom, sweden, italy and portugal between 1967 and 2007.
Overall, the average average carbon dioxide emission per person are diffrent countries in about the different years, United Kindom matric tone are high approximately reduce the end year and the other Portugal are the started iin the start in urgently and time to timre are soar.
The United Kingdom are the start in CO2 emission in matric tone are 10 qnd the 1967 drop slowlely and the end of 2007. The Portugal are the start in 0 and the escalate the 2007, all the country stat in different but the end year are the same .
The Swedan are the start in up to the 8 and the raoidely increase touch under the united kngdom, and then sharply increase in up to the 6 and do not stable but the slump and te end of 2007b. The all countries are diffrent co
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response responds to the task only minimally and tangentially. While the candidate attempts to discuss carbon dioxide emissions in the four specified countries, the overview and details are extremely confused and fail to accurately report the main features or make valid comparisons. For instance, statements such as 'The Portugal are the start in 0 and the escalate the 2007' misrepresent the actual data provided in the graph, where Portugal started at approximately 1.2 metric tonnes. Furthermore, the information is disjointed, and the attempt at an overview in the second paragraph fails to clearly summarise the overall trends. To move to a higher level, the writer must carefully select key features, present an accurate and clear overview, and ensure that data points and comparisons are correctly reported without distortion.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
Information and ideas are not arranged coherently in this response. The writing lacks a clear logical progression, jumping abruptly between countries and time periods without clear transitions. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is chaotic, making the text very difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, resulting in mechanical and confusing links between sentences, such as 'and the other Portugal are the started iin the start in urgently and time to timre are soar.' To improve coherence, the writer needs to group related information logically—such as comparing countries with rising trends versus those with falling trends—and use basic cohesive markers to guide the reader smoothly through the text.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with numerous errors in word choice, word form, and spelling that frequently strain the reader's comprehension. Examples of lexical inadequacy include 'illistration' instead of illustration, 'diffrent' instead of different, 'matric tone' instead of metric tonnes, and 'raoidely' instead of rapidly. The student also struggles with basic collocations and terminology relevant to graphical data. To achieve a higher score, the writer must expand their lexical range to include precise terms for describing data trends (e.g., fluctuate, decline, peak) and pay much closer attention to accurate spelling and word formation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, with frequent errors that constantly distort meaning and impede communication. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and basic sentence construction. For example, phrases like 'The United Kingdom are the start in CO2 emission in matric tone are 10 qnd the 1967 drop slowlely' display a complete breakdown of grammatical control, incorrect prepositions, and faulty verb tenses. Punctuation is also erratic. To progress, the writer needs to practise constructing simple, grammatically correct sentences before attempting complex structures, ensuring proper use of verbs, articles, and basic sentence patterns.
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