Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
this graph illustrate the information about the emisson of carbon dioxides per person in these few countries which includes United kingdom, sweden, portugal,and italy in the era of 1967 to 2007.
overall, the carbon dioxides emission change continously across all the countries.while United kingdom and portugal gains attention as emissions of Co2 kept rising and decreasing throughout the time period.
initally, United kingdom is at the top of emitting highest ratio of carbon dioxide. while portugal remains at the lowest point. moreover sweden and italy where able to spot second and third position.
Moreover, after the period of 1977 table turns and p
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, stopping abruptly at just 103 words. Furthermore, the writing cuts off mid-sentence, leaving the task entirely unfinished. While the introduction attempts to present the topic and an overview is cursorily stated, the lack of development and the incomplete nature of the response mean that the main features of the chart are only minimally addressed. To reach a higher level, the response must be fully developed, cover all countries and data trends thoroughly, and meet the required word count.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response shows an attempt to structure the writing with paragraph breaks and basic cohesive devices such as 'overall', 'initially', and 'moreover'. However, because the text cuts off abruptly, there is no logical conclusion or progression of ideas to the end of the task. Referencing is occasionally basic, and the overall organizational structure remains incomplete. To improve coherence and cohesion, the writer needs to ensure that the text flows logically from introduction to overview and body paragraphs, completing all intended points without trailing off.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with noticeable errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'emisson', 'carbon dioxides', and lowercase country names like 'sweden' and 'united kingdom'. There are also awkward phrasings like 'gains attention as emissions of Co2 kept rising and decreasing' and 'table turns'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to signal the topic of the graph, these errors and the limited range prevent the response from achieving a higher lexical band. To improve, the student should expand their range of vocabulary for describing statistical trends and ensure accurate spelling and capitalization.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammatical structures attempted are largely basic, and errors occur frequently. Issues include missing capitalization for proper nouns ('United kingdom', 'sweden', 'portugal'), subject-verb agreement errors ('sweden and italy where able'), and missing articles ('is at the top of emitting highest ratio'). Because the response is very short and cuts off mid-sentence, the range of complex structures is extremely limited. To improve in this area, the writer needs to practice accurate sentence construction, careful punctuation, correct use of articles, and consistent control over verb forms and capitalization.
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