Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
in this graph has comperisen between different countries Like united Kingdom,sweden,italy And Portugal the Graph x-axis show the 1967year to 2007And the y-axis show the average from 1 to 12 .ine first year 1967 show the graph the CO2 emissions in metrice tonnes are started from portugal from 0 to 5 but after time to time in second year italy the CO2 emissions in metric tonnes were started from y-axis point 4 and then it will be reached 2001 and thired countery sweden the co2 emissions in metric tonnes were started point 8 anthen it will be increase in 1977 and then it will be decrease in 1987 but after time to the it were be decrease in 1997 and 2007 the CO2 emissions in metric tonnes were Further decrease And the last country united kingdom the CO2 emissions in metric tonnes were started at the point of 10.5 then it will be decrees in 1967 and it will be further decrees in 1977 and then it will be decrees in 1987 and it will also be decrees and and 1997 the co2 emissions in metric tonnes were further decrees and tn the year of 2007 it will be very low .
Concolusio:
the main idea of the graph is the co2 will be increase in portugal,and the second country is italy the emissions is started from point 4 and it wrer be increase after time to time and the thierd countery is sweden the CO2 emissions is increase in 1977 and then it will be decrees in time to time in 2007 and the last country united Kingdom the CO2 Emissions well be decrees in time to time form the year in 2007. it mean the portugal,italy the CO2 emissions were increase and the other two countery sweden,United Kingdom the CO2 emission were also decreese
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response makes an attempt to address the prompt by describing the carbon dioxide emissions data for the four countries, which aligns with the lower-middle band expectations. However, the task is only partially addressed because the coverage of the main features is restricted and lacks accurate synthesis. For instance, the writer attempts to track the trends country by country, such as stating that Italy's emissions started at 'point 4' and Sweden's at 'point 8', but the narrative becomes repetitive and fails to clearly highlight overarching trends or significant comparative differences between the nations. Furthermore, some data points are described vaguely or inaccurately, such as the claim that Portugal started from '0 to 5', which does not reflect the given data. To move up, the response needs to select and clearly report all key features and make meaningful comparisons across the entire forty-year period.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The organization of the response lacks a clear overall progression. Although the text is divided into a general opening and a 'Concolusio' section, the arrangement of ideas is somewhat disjointed and difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are used minimally and repetitively, with excessive reliance on conjunctions like 'and' and temporal transitions such as 'after time to time' and 'then it will be'. Referencing between sentences is often unclear, meaning the reader struggles to track which country or trend is being discussed. Paragraphing is rudimentary and does not guide the reader logically through the data. To achieve a higher score, the text needs a clear introduction, well-defined body paragraphs grouping related data, and a logical progression of ideas supported by a wider and more accurate range of cohesive devices.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and minimally adequate for the task. The student attempts to use some topic-specific terms such as 'CO2 emissions', 'metric tonnes', and country names, but the lexical range is severely restricted. There are frequent lexical errors, including word form errors like 'metrice' instead of metric, and non-standard phrasing such as 'after time to time' instead of over time, and 'thired countery' instead of third country. These errors, alongside persistent spelling mistakes like 'comperisen', 'decrees', and 'Concolusio', cause some difficulty for the reader. To improve lexical resource, the writer needs to expand their range of vocabulary to include synonyms and precise data-reporting verbs and adjectives, while ensuring correct spelling and word formation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on basic, repetitive sentence structures joined by coordinating conjunctions. The writer attempts complex structures, but these are frequently faulty, leading to run-on sentences such as 'the Graph x-axis show the 1967year to 2007And the y-axis show the average from 1 to 12 .' Verb tense usage is highly inaccurate and inconsistent, frequently mixing present and future tenses to describe past data, as seen in 'co2 will be increase' and 'emissions well be decrees'. Additionally, there are persistent errors in articles, prepositions, and punctuation, with capitalisation used incorrectly throughout. Frequent structural errors cause strain and make it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. To progress, the student must demonstrate better control over basic sentence boundaries, verb tenses for historical data, and accurate punctuation.
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