Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO₂) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph shows us that the average carbon dioxide (co2) emmisions per person in the united kingdom. there was a fell emmison from 11 to 9 in y axis in x axis that show us from 1967 to 2007. portugal was increased from 1 to 5 from 1967 to 2007, In Italy there was a fluctuate between these years. sweden rise in beginning then they fall in 1977 to 2007. A few years ago the people of united kingdom living in urban areas were very anxious about the emmisions per person but they tried to convinien their people's to live in rural ares and they agree with this, but portuguese people only rise from beginning to end they analyze their problems on work in it that's why they only rise the number of person in United Kingdom 20 percent drop dramatically between 1967 to 2007 overall, they facing problems of average carbon dioxide.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several relevant overall movements: UK emissions fell, Portugal’s rose, and Sweden rose before declining. However, the account is only partly accurate and does not clearly summarise the graph as a whole. Italy is described as fluctuating, although its emissions rose steadily from about 4 to 8 tonnes and then levelled off. Sweden’s rise occurred from 1967 to 1977, not from 1977 onward, and the claim that UK emissions dropped by “20 percent” is not supported by the chart. The discussion about urban and rural residents, people agreeing, and work-related problems is invented and unrelated to the data. Focus on the four countries’ trends and give a concise, accurate overview with key comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.0

Some country-by-country sequencing is visible, and phrases such as “from 1967 to 2007” help indicate the time period. However, the response is presented as one long, loosely connected paragraph, so the main overview and supporting details are difficult to distinguish. Several ideas are joined with commas or “but” without clear relationships, especially in the final sentence, where the discussion shifts from emissions to people’s choices and work. Use a clear structure: an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and a short paragraph comparing the countries’ figures. Keep each sentence focused on one point and use linking words only when they accurately show the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, including “average carbon dioxide,” “emissions,” “rise,” and “fall,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is basic and several word choices or forms make the meaning unclear, such as “a fluctuate,” “a fell emmison,” and “convinien their people's.” Repetition of “rise” and “from…to…” also limits precision. Some phrases, including “the number of person,” do not describe the graph’s measurement accurately: it shows emissions per person, not the number of people. Build a small set of accurate trend expressions, such as “declined gradually,” “increased steadily,” and “remained stable,” and check spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to report changes over time and use some simple clauses, but sentence control is inconsistent and errors often make relationships between ideas hard to follow. For example, “there was a fell emmison” has an incorrect verb pattern, while “sweden rise in beginning then they fall” shifts tense and has unclear agreement. Capitalisation and punctuation are also unreliable: several sentences begin with lowercase country names, and the long final section is joined without clear sentence boundaries. Practise accurate past-tense forms for the historical data (“fell,” “rose,” “remained”) and build complete sentences with a clear subject and verb. Shorter, correctly punctuated sentences will make your comparisons easier to understand.

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