Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO₂) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph represent the data of average Carbon dioxide and report main feautures

From the overview , Average Carbon dioxide emissions per person from year [redacted phone] in four countries: United kingdom , Sweden , Italy , Portugal

After Analysing the task , it is clear that in the United Kingdom in year [redacted phone] the consuming average is 11metric tonnes and In Sweden in 1967 the Co2 emission metric tonnes is near 8.5. in year 1987to1997 the United Kingdom shows downward trend assumption of Carbon dioxide and Suddenly the Sweden followed upward trend in Consuming

Carbon Dioxide emiision upto 10 metric tones the first higher assumption country is only the United Kingdom and on Secon numberis only the Sweden Country .

Moving further , the Italy assumption start from 4metric tonnes in year 1967 -and going in upward trend in year, 1977 consuming is near 6.5 metric tonnes and the most less consuming country is the Portugal and it is Start from 1.5 only in year [redacted phone] but in year 1987 it goes upto 4 metric tonnes and in year 1997 its fluctuate between 5to 5.5 metric tones

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the countries and the overall period, and you report some relevant figures, such as the UK being around 11 tonnes at the start and Sweden reaching about 10 tonnes in 1977. However, the response only partially summarises the graph: it gives no clear overview of the main trends across all four countries and omits the UK’s steady decline, Sweden’s fall after 1977, and Italy’s rise to a plateau at the end. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: Portugal is about 3.3 tonnes in 1987, not 4, and the UK is not the highest throughout the period because Sweden briefly rises close to it. Select the key trends and compare the beginning and ending positions more accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into an opening, an overview-like paragraph and a further paragraph, with transitions such as “Moving further.” This gives the reader some indication of movement between countries. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview mostly restates the task, while the body combines several countries and years in long, loosely connected sentences. Phrases such as “in year 1987to1997” and “the first higher assumption country” make the relationships between points unclear. Use a clear overview followed by logically grouped comparisons—for example, the declining UK and Sweden trends, then the rising Italy and Portugal trends—and use linking words only where they clarify those relationships.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, including “downward trend,” “upward trend,” and “metric tonnes,” so the subject is generally recognisable. However, the range is basic and several repeated or inaccurate expressions strain the reader’s understanding. “Consuming” and “assumption” are not suitable for describing emissions, while “most less consuming country” is an awkward way to identify Portugal as the lowest emitter. Spelling errors such as “feautures,” “emiision,” and “tones,” along with inconsistent forms such as “Carbon dioxide” and “Co2,” also reduce clarity. Build a more precise set of graph-description terms and check spelling; for example, use “emissions,” “figure,” “rose,” “fell,” and “remained stable” appropriately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect information in longer sentences, but grammatical control is limited and errors frequently make the comparisons hard to interpret. For example, “The line graph represent” has subject–verb disagreement, and “in year 1967-1977 the consuming average is 11metric tonnes” has problems with articles, tense, and sentence structure. Several clauses are joined without clear punctuation, as in the sentence beginning “Moving further,” which makes the sequence of figures difficult to follow. Most sentences rely on basic patterns, with little accurate variety. Practise writing short, complete comparisons using past-tense verbs, correct articles and clear punctuation, then combine ideas with controlled clauses such as “while” or “whereas.”

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