Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO₂) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph shows the information of average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

Overall, highest carbon dioxide is emits by a person of united state and the sweden person emits second highest carban dioxide. Whereas, the portugal emits very small amount of carbon dioxide.

First, we descride the information of increasing corbon dioxide person of the countries. At first the portugal person can emits only 1 metric tonnes which is recorded in 1967 and it most lest record of carbon dioxide which increaces dramatically with the ratio of 1 metric tonnes per year and reached at 2 metric tonnes in 1977 and 3 mitric tonnes in 1987 and 5 mitric tonnes in 1997 and than in 2007 it remain constant at 5 metic tonnes. Italy starts from modrate corbon dioxide emission but it also increases drastically. In 1967 it is 4 mitric tonnes and in 1977 in has a great increase with 2 mitric tonnes and it is 6 mitric tonnes as recorded. In 1987 it had a slide increase of 6.5 matric tonnes.

Now, decreasing countries with aspect of carbon dioxide. the united state has 11 mitric tonnes in 1967then it starts decreasing consistant

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the graph’s subject and include some relevant figures, such as Portugal’s rise from about 1 to 5 tonnes and Italy’s increase from roughly 4 to 6.5 tonnes in the earlier years. However, the response reports the data only partially and the overview contains a major factual error: the highest emissions were in the United Kingdom, not the “united state,” while Sweden was not second-highest throughout. The account also stops partway through the UK trend and does not report the later figures for Italy or the key changes in Sweden. To improve, give a concise overview of the main contrasts, then cover all four countries’ overall trends accurately, selecting a few representative figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview and sections for rising and falling trends. Phrases such as “First” and “Now” signal a change of focus, and the Portugal and Italy details are presented in roughly chronological order. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview is inaccurate, the discussion shifts between countries without a complete comparison, and the final sentence ends before the UK trend is explained. Some links, including “Whereas,” do not connect the ideas clearly. Use separate, purposeful paragraphs and organise the body by country or by contrasting trends, with clear transitions and a complete ending.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “emissions,” “increases,” “decreasing,” and “metric tonnes,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is basic and repeated, and frequent spelling and word-choice problems make parts difficult to understand: “corbon,” “mitric,” “lest,” and “slide increase” are examples. Some expressions are also unnatural, such as “the information of average” and “with the ratio of 1 metric tonnes per year.” Aim for accurate collocations used in graph descriptions, such as “emissions per person,” “rose steadily,” and “reached approximately.” Check spelling carefully and avoid describing a decade-to-decade change as a yearly rate unless the graph provides that information.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses linked with “which” and “whereas,” but control is limited and errors are frequent enough to obscure meaning. Examples include “highest carbon dioxide is emits,” “the portugal emits,” and “it remain constant,” which show problems with verb forms and subject–verb agreement. Articles, sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “1967then it starts decreasing consistant.” Several sentences combine multiple figures without clear grammatical structure. Build accuracy first with short, complete sentences using a consistent past tense: for example, “Portugal’s emissions rose from about 1 tonne in 1967 to 5 tonnes in 1997.” Then add longer comparisons once those patterns are secure.

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