Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO₂) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

If we summarize the information we are getting from the graph then we will get to know the average carbon dioxide emission per person in th UK,Sweden and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. This graph analyze that from 1967 to 2007 the emission of carbon dioxide per person in Portugal had a increase of about 4 metric tones it started from 2 metric tones and reached the limit in 2007 at 4 metric tones then if we have a look on Italy the emission per person rises from 4 mettic tones to almost 8 metric tones its a very big increase after that comes the emission by swedon the graph depicts that the emission per person had a decrease from 8 metric tones to 4 metric tones and lastly the UK emission per person indicates that it had a decrease from about 10.5 to 8.5 metric tones

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the general direction of change for all four countries, and the UK and Sweden figures are broadly close to the graph. However, the response only partially reports the task: it omits Italy from the opening summary and gives no clear overall overview of the main comparisons, such as the UK remaining highest while Portugal rises from the lowest level. Several figures are substantially inaccurate: Portugal starts at about 1 tonne and ends near 5.4, not 2 and 4; Italy rises from about 4.3 to 7.6, rather than almost 8 without a clear endpoint; Sweden ends near 5.4, not 4. The response is also three words below the required minimum. Include a concise overview and check key start and end values.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a basic country-by-country sequence, moving from Portugal to Italy, Sweden and the UK, so the reader can identify which trend is being discussed. However, it is presented as one long sentence-like paragraph, with few effective breaks or clear stages. Linking phrases such as “after that comes” and “lastly” provide some sequencing, but the repeated pattern makes the progression mechanical, and the opening “If we summarize … then we will get to know” delays the actual report. Use a separate overview followed by logically grouped details, and connect comparisons directly—for example, contrast the UK’s gradual decline with Portugal’s steady rise. This would make the organisation clearer and reduce reliance on repetitive transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant basic terms, including “emission per person,” “decrease,” “rises,” and “metric tones,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, vocabulary is limited and several choices or spellings are inaccurate, which can distract the reader: “mettic,” “swedon,” and “tones” should be corrected to “metric” and “Sweden” and “tonnes.” Phrases such as “reached the limit” do not describe a graph endpoint naturally, while “a very big increase” is vague and informal. Aim for precise reporting language such as “rose to,” “declined steadily,” and “approximately,” and vary “emission” with “emissions” or “per-capita CO₂ output.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts longer sentences and uses some basic past-tense reporting, including “started” and “reached,” but the range is limited and complex sentences are often poorly controlled. The opening construction, “If we summarize … then we will get to know,” is an awkward conditional for describing a completed graph, and the long sequence beginning “This graph analyze” runs several ideas together without reliable sentence boundaries. There are also errors in agreement and articles, as in “graph analyze” and “had a increase.” Use simple, complete sentences with consistent past tense: “The graph shows…” followed by “Portugal’s emissions rose…”. Add full stops and commas to separate each country’s figures and trends.

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