Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The graph shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the united kingdom, sweden, italy and portugal between 1967 and 2007.
The graph illustrate the average carbon dioxide emissions per person, [redacted phone].
The x-axis shows the carbon dioxode emissions in metric tonnes and the y-axis shows the years.In the year of 1967 to 2007 the UK and sweden is decrease in 11 to 8 tonnes in UK and 11 to 5 tonnes for sweden the sweden s mostly decrease after the year of 1977.Italy and portugal is mostly increase from the year of 1967 upto 2007 the tonnes of italy is rise from 4 to 9 tonnes and the portugal tonnes is boost from 1 to 5 continuously in all years.
They make comparisons for the countries of united kingdom and sweden is compare with the countries italy and portugal.
The tonnes of italy and portugal is mostly and highly expand as compared to UK and sweden.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
You identify the four countries and the overall contrast between falling emissions in the UK and Sweden and rising figures in Italy and Portugal. However, the account is brief and the overview is not sufficiently precise: for example, Italy rises from about 4 to 8 tonnes, not 9, and Portugal ends at about 5 tonnes. The UK declines from roughly 11 to 9 tonnes, rather than 8. You also omit important comparisons, such as the UK remaining highest throughout and Italy overtaking Sweden by 1987. The response contains 142 words, so it does not meet the 150-word minimum; 15 words copied from the task prompt were excluded. Add accurate key figures and a clearer overview of the main rankings and changes.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response has a basic sequence: an opening, a description of trends, and a concluding comparison. This gives the reader some sense of the topic, but the organisation is not consistently clear. The first two sentences repeat the same introduction, while the final two sentences repeat the idea that Italy and Portugal increased more than the UK and Sweden. The sentence beginning “The x-axis shows” also reverses the axes, which disrupts the explanation. Several ideas are joined in long, loosely connected sentences, with limited punctuation and few clear transitions. Group the information into a concise introduction, an overview, and focused detail paragraphs, and use linking phrases to show contrasts and time changes.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “emissions,” “metric tonnes,” “decrease,” and “increase,” so the reader can generally understand the subject. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing a graph. “The tonnes of Italy is rise” and “Portugal tonnes is boost” do not express the trends naturally; “emissions rose” or “increased” would be clearer. “Highly expand” is also an unsuitable collocation, and “mostly” is repeated without adding precise meaning. There are spelling and form errors, such as “dioxode” and “united kingdom.” Use standard country names and a wider set of accurate trend verbs, while avoiding repeated or vague wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response communicates a few basic comparisons, but grammatical control is weak and sentence structures are mostly simple or faulty attempts at longer forms. Agreement errors occur in “The graph illustrate” and “Italy and portugal is mostly increase.” Verb forms are also problematic in “the UK and sweden is decrease” and “the tonnes of italy is rise.” The sentence “The x-axis shows … and the y-axis shows the years” lacks appropriate spacing and is followed by a run-on transition into the next idea. Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, including lower-case country names and missing spaces after full stops. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and past-tense trend descriptions, then build longer sentences with clear punctuation.
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