Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO₂) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

CO2 emission in UK in 1967 is 11000kg but it is decreasing countnuly .in 1997 it was 10000kg and in 2007 it reduced came to about 8000kg.

in case of sweden CO2 emission in 1967 it was about 8000kg but in 1977 large increase came CO2 emission go above 10000kg after that in 1987 there was big decrease CO2emission ca MN e to 7000kg after 1987 countnsly reducing in 2007 it came to 5000kg.

in case of italy grap showing that in 1967 italy has CO2 emission is 4000kg but it is increase regulary in 1967 it was about 6000kg and at 1987 it was 6500kg in 1997 and 2007 it was same 7800kg grap showing it.

in case of portugal the CO2 ratewas low at 1967 that was only 1400kg but it increase regularly at 1967 it was 2100kg in 1987 came to 3000kg in 1997 and 2007 remain same about 5000kg.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You report all four countries and identify several broad movements, including the UK’s decline, Sweden’s rise and subsequent fall, and increases in Italy and Portugal. However, the response has no clear overall summary comparing the countries, and some figures or dates are inaccurate. For example, the UK is reported at about 10,000 kg in 1997, although the graph shows roughly 9,500 kg; Italy’s 1977 value is given as 6,000 kg rather than about 6,300; and Portugal’s 1967 figure is stated as 1,400 kg rather than around 1,200. The repeated claim that values occurred “at 1967” also obscures the sequence. Select the main trends accurately and add an overview, such as noting that the UK remained highest while Portugal rose from the lowest level.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a recognisable country-by-country order, so readers can generally tell which series is being described. However, it is presented as one continuous block rather than clearly organised paragraphs, and the repeated openings “in case of” make the progression mechanical. Some links between stages are unclear: the Italy and Portugal descriptions say “in 1967” when moving to later values, which disrupts the timeline. Punctuation and spacing also make boundaries between ideas difficult to follow. Group the information into an introduction and overview, followed by two comparison paragraphs, and use clear time markers such as “by 1977,” “thereafter,” and “by the end of the period” to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic task-related terms such as “increase,” “decrease,” and “emission,” and the country names and units are generally recognisable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and often inaccurate or awkward, which sometimes strains understanding. Examples include “decreasing countnuly,” “large increase came,” and “remain same”; these do not express trends naturally. There are also spelling and word-form problems, including “regulary,” “countnsly,” and “grap.” Use standard collocations such as “emissions fell steadily,” “rose sharply,” and “remained stable.” Be consistent with the chart’s unit, metric tonnes, rather than converting to kilograms, and use “emissions” as a plural noun when describing the figures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to describe changes over time, but most sentences rely on simple, repeated patterns and contain frequent errors in sentence construction, tense, articles, and punctuation. For instance, “CO2 emission in UK in 1967 is 11000kg but it is decreasing” shifts from present to past and lacks natural article use; “in 1997 it was 10000kg and in 2007 it reduced came to” combines incompatible verb forms. The Italy sentence beginning “in 1967 italy has CO2 emission is” is also difficult to parse. These errors sometimes obscure the intended comparisons. Practise complete past-tense sentences, for example, “UK emissions stood at about 10.8 tonnes in 1967 and fell to 8.7 tonnes by 2007,” and separate ideas with accurate full stops.

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