Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The line graph below show the illustrate the average carbon dioxide discharges only one person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 and 2007. i will explain the average carbon dioxide releases per person.
Overall, carbon dioxide emissions in metric tonnes. The highest peak site is United Kingdom. The lowest country in average carbon dioxide is Portugal. These are the main point in line graph.
Looking at the point, in 1967 the portugal is 3 metric tonnes in average carbon dioxide. The Italy country is 4 metric tonnes. But, the Sweden and Portugal are in 2007 is the same site in line graph that are 5 metric tonnes. The United Kingdom is in 2007
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response identifies the countries and period, and its overview correctly notes that the UK is highest overall and Portugal is lowest at the start. However, the account is very incomplete: it gives inaccurate starting figures for Portugal and Italy (about 1 and 4 tonnes, not 3 and 4.3), and it does not describe the main trends, such as the UK’s gradual decline, Sweden’s rise then fall, or Italy and Portugal’s increases. The final sentence about the UK in 2007 is unfinished, leaving a key comparison unclear. The response is also 42 words below the 150-word minimum, which limits the coverage of the task. To improve, provide a complete overview and select accurate figures to support the major trends.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
There is a basic attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview and a detail paragraph, and phrases such as “Overall” and “Looking at the point” signal a change in focus. However, progression is weak because the overview repeats that these are the “main point” without developing them, and the detail paragraph jumps between years and countries without a clear comparison. The sentence “But, the Sweden and Portugal are in 2007…” is difficult to follow, while the final sentence stops before completing its idea. Use one paragraph for the overall trends and then group details by comparable patterns, linking each figure clearly to its year and country.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, including “average carbon dioxide,” “metric tonnes,” “highest” and “lowest,” so the subject is generally recognisable. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive: “discharges” and “releases” are not natural substitutes for emissions in this context, and “highest peak site” and “same site” do not clearly describe graph values. “Main point” is also repeated rather than using more precise language for trends or comparisons. Build a small set of accurate graph terms—such as “emissions,” “rose,” “declined,” “remained stable” and “stood at”—and use them consistently. This would make the limited vocabulary more precise and reduce the effort required to understand the comparisons.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response attempts several sentence forms, including an opening description and a contrast introduced by “But,” but control is inconsistent and the range remains limited. The opening has subject–verb and structure problems (“graph below show the illustrate”), while “from 1967 and 2007” uses an incorrect time construction. Articles and sentence structure are also problematic in “the portugal” and “The Italy country,” and the final sentence, “The United Kingdom is in 2007,” is incomplete. These errors sometimes make relationships between the data difficult to understand. Practise complete, simple comparison sentences first, checking subject–verb agreement, articles and past-tense forms; then add a few accurate complex sentences using “while” or “whereas.”
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