Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

As immigration increases, the demands of learning a foreign language in order to travel to or work in a country has become an increasely important concern. While some people believe that learning a new language is important for effective communication in both the country and its workplace, Others disagree to this notion because new languages are a great way of understanding cultural diversity. In my opinion, I largely agree with the second view as learning a new language doesn't only help to overcome language barrier while living in foreign country and in a workplace but also helps in understanding our intercultural diversities which creates a spirit of belonging.

One advantage of learning a new language is that it helps in effective communication at workplace and other places in the country. This is largely due to that fact that most countries official language is not English and the medium of communication at their workplaces is in their native tongues. As a result, learning a new language will help the immigrant to understand basic communication skills that will help in socializing with colleagues at work.

However, other people believe that learning a new language is not for work or living in a foreign country alone but that it also helps in understanding our intercultural diversities. This is particularly important because people have different belief systems and understanding their background and cultures is what will bring about a feeling of belonging in their country. The reason for this is that, not embracing a people's culture can make you to be an outcast in a foreign country.

In my opinion, new languages are a great way to overcome communication barrier in a foreign country, at work, market stores and even at home with neighbors. But it is also essential in understanding our intercultural diversities.

In conclusion, although learning a new language is beneficial for workplace communication and living in a country, there are also other benefits such as understanding intercultural diversities and creating the spirit of belonging in the immigrants.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You discuss both views and state a clear preference for the broader benefits of language learning, especially cultural understanding and belonging. The workplace paragraph gives a relevant reason—communication with colleagues when English is not the main language—and the cultural paragraph explains how understanding local beliefs may help someone feel included. However, the two sides are not developed equally: the first view is mainly about workplace communication, with travel receiving little direct attention, while the second view relies on general claims rather than a specific example. Your conclusion restates the position but does not add support. To strengthen the response, address travel explicitly and develop each main point with a concrete example or fuller explanation. (Nine words copied from the task prompt were not counted.)

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, your opinion, and a conclusion. Signposting such as “One advantage,” “However,” and “In conclusion” helps readers follow the discussion. The progression is generally logical, but the opinion paragraph repeats points already made in the body, so it contributes little new development. Some links are also mechanical or unclear; for example, “This is largely due to that fact” introduces an explanation awkwardly, and “The reason for this is that” repeats the same explanatory function. The relationship between the workplace view and the cultural view could be connected more smoothly. Use referencing and transitions more selectively, and ensure each paragraph advances the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including “effective communication,” “cultural diversity,” “belief systems,” and “spirit of belonging.” These choices make the main ideas clear, and the response attempts some less common expressions. However, several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “increasely important concern,” “overcome language barrier,” and “understanding our intercultural diversities.” “At workplace” and “in market stores” also sound imprecise in context. These issues do not prevent understanding, but they limit the naturalness and precision of the vocabulary. Aim for established collocations and more exact phrasing, and check spelling and word forms, including “increasingly.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including subordinate clauses beginning “While,” “because,” and “although.” Most ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors occur. For example, “the demands … has become” has a subject–verb agreement problem, and “most countries official language” needs a possessive form and clearer agreement. Articles and plurals are also inconsistent in phrases such as “overcome language barrier” and “in foreign country.” The sentence “not embracing a people's culture can make you to be an outcast” has an incorrect verb pattern after “make.” Review agreement, articles, possessives, and verb patterns, then proofread punctuation and capitalization, including the unnecessary capital in “Others.”

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