Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In the contemporary world, some people believe that it is important to learn foreign language such as English for travelling and to get job. While, others opine that there are other more reasons to learn a foreign language. Moreover, in this essay i will discuss both the views and I, however, favour with former statement.

On the one hand, some people believe that the reason behind to learn foreign language is for travelling or to do work because nowadays, in every country people give priority to their native language so, when someone is planning to go abroad to get job then it is crucial to learn foreign language because that person can easily feel comfortable and understand things as early as possible and even people can easily, talk with other employees and make good bond with them. Moreover, In travelling when you know foreign language it is easy for you to communicate with other people and even its save your time and costs for hiring any tourists or seek for anybody help. Moreover, you can talk with the residents of their country and its for you to understand their history and culture.

On the other hand, some people opine that their are other more reasons why someone should learn foreign language is it will boost your knowledge ang critical thinking. Moreover, if you know foreign language it will improve your interperson skills such as confidence and communication.

In conclusion, I believe that many people learn foreign language for travelling all over the world with their families and friends and even they can get suitable job for themselves in abroad.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response5.0
Coherence and Cohesion5.5
Lexical Resource5.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.0
Overall5.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and state a preference in the introduction, then return to travel and employment in the conclusion. The first body paragraph gives relevant reasons, such as communicating with colleagues and residents and learning about another culture. However, the position is not fully consistent: you say you favour the view that travel and work are the main reasons, but the second body paragraph lists benefits such as knowledge and confidence without explaining why you still prefer the first view. The alternative view is also only briefly developed, and the conclusion does not weigh the two sides. Develop each view with a specific example and make your opinion clear throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the contrast between the views is signalled with “On the one hand” and “On the other hand.” This gives the reader a basic route through the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: the first paragraph moves from employment to travel and culture, while the second offers two brief benefits without explanation. “Moreover” is repeated several times, and some links are awkward or unclear, such as “Moreover, in travelling.” Improve cohesion by grouping related points, using a wider range of accurate transitions, and making the relationship between each reason and the main argument explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “native language,” “communicate,” “critical thinking,” and “culture.” There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “make good bond” and “suitable job.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision: “seek for anybody help,” “save your time and costs,” and “interperson skills” do not express the intended ideas naturally. Repetition of “learn foreign language” and “people” also makes the vocabulary range seem limited. Build a bank of accurate collocations for travel, employment and personal development, and check word forms and spelling when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses with “because,” “when” and “if,” so there is some variety. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the response difficult to follow. Examples include “the reason behind to learn,” “when someone is planning to go abroad to get job,” and “their are other more reasons why someone should learn foreign language is it will boost.” Articles, agreement, sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention. For example, “While, others opine” is not a complete sentence, and the final sentence contains an unclear construction. Practise building shorter, accurate sentences first, then combine ideas using controlled subordinate clauses.

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