Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadays, More and more individuals argue that the only reason for learning a foreing language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country, while other people believe that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. This essay will discuss both views, and In my opinion,only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country, because more and more people aim going other and earning lot of money and return to village, also many individuals explor many city and natural and come back to a this can help many peolpe also don't going language classes and also save lot of money.

On the one hand, Some individuals think thet only reason for learning a other countries language is in order to travel to or work in a other country. One of the main thing are more and more people going their jobs and work sarted they not need a other language this can help people more confatable and also feel fresh. For example, many individuals going there many earning lot of money and also retun to back village, also their strated a small business and hotel they can not need for other country language. other more and more people going foreign country explor and also reduce strecess because nowadays, many people are active social media and also uplode many videos and photo, this can help people explor new places and also grow financial condation.

On the other hand, more and more people say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a other country language. one main point are they also find out a location also learn about their history and culture this can help many peolpe new experience and also new friends find also grow other language, commucation skills.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear opinion—that travel and work are the only reasons to learn a language—and you attempt to discuss both views. However, the response only minimally addresses the task: the first view is difficult to follow, and the opposing view receives just one brief point about learning culture, history, and communication. Your reasons are not clearly explained or supported with a relevant, specific example, and some material about social media and earning money does not directly establish why language learning is necessary. The response also contains 242 words, below the required 250; the 70 words copied from the task prompt are excluded from this count. Develop both sides more fully and explain how each example supports your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an identifiable introduction and two body paragraphs, and the signposts “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” show an attempt to organise the discussion. However, ideas within the paragraphs are not arranged coherently: the first body paragraph moves from work to comfort, village businesses, social media, stress, and finances without clear links. The final paragraph is very short and does not develop the opposing view or lead to a conclusion. Repeated use of “also” and “this can help” does not make the relationships between points clear, and some references such as “this” have no precise antecedent. Give each paragraph one main purpose, sequence its supporting points, and add a concluding paragraph.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “foreign language,” “history and culture,” “communication skills,” and “financial condition,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices that strain understanding. Examples include “foreing,” “explor,” “strecess,” and “condation,” as well as unclear phrases such as “going their jobs” and “explor new places.” Repeated words such as “more and more,” “people,” and “also” limit precision. Build a small bank of accurate topic vocabulary and check spelling; choose expressions that state the intended meaning directly rather than relying on vague phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences using connectors such as “while,” “because,” and “also,” but sentence structures are very limited and errors occur frequently, sometimes making the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “more and more people aim going other” lacks a correctly formed verb pattern, while “One of the main thing are” has problems with number agreement. Articles and sentence boundaries are also often inaccurate, as in “learn a other countries language” and the long opening sentence, which joins several ideas without clear punctuation. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine related ideas using controlled clauses. Check verb forms, subject–verb agreement, articles, and full stops before submitting.

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