Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Foreign language is an optimal souce of communication to build connections, share thoughts or informations, learning new knowledge or skills, doing trade or businesses, trips and employment opportunites, learning about culture and history of that respective foreign country. Most people believe that there are a large numbers of reasons why a person should learn a foreign language while some people consider it only for tavelling or working in foreign. I strongly agree with what most people believe.

Most of students do online learning from foreign professionals without travelling or working in that foreign countries. They just need understanding of foreign language of that professional and a stable source of internet. They do so in pursuit of good resources of their field, which might not be available in their own language or countries.

Similaryl, historians and tour

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear opinion—“I strongly agree with what most people believe”—and give a relevant example of students learning from foreign professionals online, which supports reasons beyond travel and employment. However, the response addresses the task only minimally: the view that language learning is solely for travel or work is not explained, and the alternative reasons are represented by only one briefly developed example. The final sentence begins another possible point about historians and tourists but is unfinished, so it cannot support your argument. The response also does not meet the stated 250-word minimum, leaving the discussion and examples substantially incomplete. Develop both views, explain your position with several specific reasons, and finish the essay with a conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The opening introduces the topic and your position, and the paragraph about online learning follows with a relevant supporting example. This gives the response a basic starting structure. However, there is not enough completed writing to establish a coherent overall progression: the second paragraph is brief, and the final line, “Similaryl, historians and tour,” stops mid-thought. As a result, the reader cannot see how the ideas would be organised or connected across a full discussion of both views. The opening list also combines several reasons without grouping or explaining them. Use separate paragraphs for each viewpoint, connect each example explicitly to the argument, and add a concluding paragraph. Check that linking expressions introduce complete ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt some topic-appropriate vocabulary, including “build connections,” “foreign professionals,” “resources of their field,” and “culture and history.” These choices show an effort to discuss communication, education, and cultural learning rather than relying only on basic terms. However, several spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, such as “souce,” “informations,” “tavelling,” and “opportunites.” Some phrases are also unnatural or unclear, including “a large numbers of reasons” and “understanding of foreign language of that professional.” The short response limits the range you can demonstrate, and the opening list relies on broad nouns rather than precise explanation. Proofread spelling and choose natural collocations, such as “access to specialist resources” and “understand the professional’s language.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both a long opening sentence and a more developed sentence explaining online learning, including the reason introduced by “which might not be available.” This shows some ability to connect clauses and express cause. However, control is uneven: “Most of students” needs a different article pattern, and “there are a large numbers of reasons” has a number-agreement problem. The opening sentence is a list of fragments rather than a complete, clearly structured sentence, while “They just need understanding…” lacks a natural grammatical construction. The unfinished final line also prevents the reader from seeing a complete sentence. Practise building clear subject–verb sentences, checking singular and plural forms, and using subordinate clauses only when the main clause is complete.

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