Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

learning a foreign language in order to work in a foreing country is quite non acceptable because some learn the language for their passion and some does for their obsession, but it is mainly depends on the person who is focused for a work job beacuse he wants to be bold and confident in office to show his skills and his communication with his fluency and talent, based on his communication skills and hard work people approach to work with him and enhance their skills by adapting his work talent and discipline. Others who say learning foreign language is not the only reason for work or to travel as they might think it is foreing language cannot judge a person with his ability of communicating and approaching people, some people feel shy and introvert to ask or address and explain their consequence where as some are bold and extrovert in explaining even if they don't know fluenced fareign language. People only concentrate on when,how and where to enjoy their journey because they feel their joyful experience is only what matters rather thinking of others.

As of my opinion people should be aware about different languages which does not mak us feel suffered or feel discomfort infront of others while communicating. Foreing language is much better rather unawareness of language would get some difficulties to pass on life throttles and speaking because this works everywhere and makes you feel bold and confident infront of everyone and also improves your communication skills.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give an opinion that people should learn languages for reasons beyond work and travel, and you mention personal interest and communication confidence. However, the two views are not clearly explained as the task requires. The discussion of work focuses on being confident and showing skills, while the reasons for travel are only briefly suggested through enjoying a journey; neither side is developed with a clear, relevant example. Some points, such as people being shy or extroverted, are difficult to connect to the question. To strengthen the response, explain why work or travel can motivate language learning, then develop other purposes—such as cultural understanding or relationships—and support each with a specific example. Make your own position explicit and consistent throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic overall shape: an opening discussion of the views is followed by a paragraph beginning “As of my opinion,” which signals your own position. Some linking expressions, including “Others” and “whereas,” show an attempt to connect contrasting ideas. However, the first paragraph contains many different points in one long sequence, and the relationships between them are often unclear. For example, the move from workplace communication to shy or extroverted travellers is abrupt. The final paragraph repeats ideas about confidence without clearly concluding the discussion. Organise the response into distinct paragraphs for each view and your opinion, and use shorter sentences with clear topic sentences and references so readers can follow the progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of vocabulary related to communication and personal qualities, including “confident,” “communication skills,” “introvert,” “extrovert,” and “discipline.” These choices show some ability to discuss the topic beyond very basic terms. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or unnatural expressions make parts difficult to understand, such as “work job,” “pass on life throttles,” and “fluenced fareign language.” Spelling errors such as “foreing” and “beacuse” also recur. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise topic vocabulary—such as “career opportunities,” “cultural exchange,” and “communicate with local residents”—would help you express relevant ideas clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas using clauses and contrast, for example in the sentence beginning “Others who say…” and the construction “where as some are bold and extrovert.” This shows an effort to use more than simple sentences. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries frequently make the meaning hard to follow. Examples include “some does,” “it is mainly depends,” and “people approach to work with him.” The opening sentence also runs on through several ideas without clear punctuation. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then join them with one clear subordinate clause or connector. Check subject–verb agreement and verb patterns when editing.

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