Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In today's world of globalisation and interconnectedness of the world countries learning the language of foreign country turns out to be need of the hour.

On one hand In learning the foreign language would help as to communicate in local medium of communication were conversation becomes smooth

when in travelling or for occupation learning the foreign language helps to converse with the local communities would make our task much easy

On the other hand some people think and say the reason for educating the foreign language would be for some other reasons other than those described earlier

For learning the foreign language would make communites to understand the feelings and emotions of the native people

When learning the foreign language would help us to mingle in the local community and can make us the part of the community

Learning the foreign language would help us in during the times of travelling and when in doing job and for becoming part of the native residence

Many people think of language as apart of culture and traditions when learning non native language would facilitate us to understand the native customs and traditions

Native languages turns out to be the medium of communication which with less efforts

In the today work of globalisation no one language would enough to understand the whole of earth

So learning the native or foreign language would help us to understand in many ways

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You refer to both views: learning a language for travel or work, and learning it to understand local people, culture, and traditions. These are relevant points, but the discussion is minimal and several ideas are repeated rather than explained. For example, the benefits of communicating while travelling or working appear more than once, while the cultural point is stated without a specific example or explanation of its importance. Your own opinion is also not clearly distinguished; the final comments suggest that language learning is broadly useful, but do not directly state which view you support and why. The response is 14 words below the required minimum, and this further limits the development of your answer. Address each view with a developed reason and example, then state your position clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response around the two views, signalled by “On one hand” and “On the other hand,” and the ideas generally relate to the topic. However, the progression is difficult to follow because most points are presented as separate, incomplete lines rather than connected paragraphs. The relationship between ideas is sometimes unclear, as in “Native languages turns out to be the medium of communication which with less efforts,” which does not complete its point. Repetition of travel, work, and community benefits also weakens the development. Use a clear introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion stating your opinion. Within paragraphs, connect each reason to an explanation or example, and use linking phrases only where they clarify the relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “globalisation,” “interconnectedness,” “local communities,” and “customs and traditions.” This gives you a basic range for discussing language and culture. However, vocabulary is often repetitive, particularly “foreign language,” “learning,” and “help,” and several combinations are unnatural or unclear, such as “local medium of communication” and “native residence.” There are also spelling and word-form problems, including “communites” and “apart” where “a part” is intended. These choices sometimes make the meaning harder to understand. Build a wider set of accurate expressions for communication, employment, cultural understanding, and travel, and check collocations and spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer structures, including clauses beginning with “when” and “would,” but control is inconsistent and the range remains limited. Frequent errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and punctuation can make meaning difficult to follow. For example, “In today's world of globalisation and interconnectedness of the world countries learning the language of foreign country turns out to be need of the hour” lacks clear sentence boundaries and has missing articles. “Native languages turns out” also has a subject–verb agreement error, while several lines beginning “When learning…” are incomplete clauses. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and main verb, and use a full stop to separate ideas. Then check articles and singular/plural agreement systematically.

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