Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the 21st century, the world has become a gloablized due to invention of the latest technology. Foreign language is necessary for travel and work in a foreign country. Others say foreign language should learn due to multiple reasons. From my point of view, learning a foreign language is compulsory for travel and work in different countries.

On the one hand, many people and workers go abroad for travelling and getting a job in multiple sectors. Pakistan is a developing country. People go to abroad for the purpose of getting a job. The Gulf countries and European countries are the hub of foreign jobs. People should be learnt Arabic and multiple european languages to improve the professional career. For instance, German language is necessary to obtain the work visa and permanent residency. Similarly, many other countries pass the law to obtain foreign language certificate for the object of work visa and travelling. For example, South Korea built the language offices in different countries to provide assistance for foreigners.

On the other hand, Some person wants to go abroad to obtain the knowledge of culture of different countries. They travel country to country in the whole years. Travelling become the hobby for this type of personality. For example, Europeans came to Pakistan for exploring the northern areas. Many mountains are having in Pakistan. Similary, some tourist go to Napal for climbing the mount Evarest.

In short, to become the proficient in foreign language is a good tool for travelling and working in different countries. At present, foreign language become the source of revenue.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You present a position—that language learning is mainly necessary for travel and work—and give relevant examples involving jobs in the Gulf and Europe. However, the task asks you to discuss both views, and the alternative view is not fully explored: the paragraph about tourism describes why people travel, rather than explaining clearly why they might learn a language for reasons beyond travel or employment. Your final sentence also returns to travel and work, so your opinion on the broader reasons remains limited. The examples are relevant but some claims, such as German being necessary for a work visa and residency, need explanation or qualification. Develop the wider benefits, such as cultural understanding or personal interest, and make your position address both sides directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signposted by “On the one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. This helps readers identify the two sections of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the South Korea example follows claims about language certificates without explaining how it supports them, and the tourism paragraph moves from cultural knowledge to hobby and then to examples without a clear link to language learning. Some linking phrases are repetitive or do not accurately show the relationship between ideas. Build each paragraph around one clear point, explain how each example supports it, and use referencing and transitions more precisely to make the argument flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “professional career,” “permanent residency,” “language certificate,” and “exploring the northern areas.” These choices show an attempt to discuss work, travel, and culture rather than relying only on basic words. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “a globalized,” “go to abroad,” “the hub of foreign jobs,” and “for the object of work visa.” Spelling errors in “globalized,” “Similary,” “Napal,” and “Evarest” also reduce accuracy. The meaning is generally recoverable, but these errors make expression less natural. Focus on learning common word partnerships and checking spelling, especially for key terms and place names.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use structures such as “to improve the professional career” and “to obtain the knowledge of culture,” alongside simpler statements. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in basic sentence patterns, verb forms, articles, and agreement. Examples include “the world has become a gloablized,” “People should be learnt,” “Travelling become the hobby,” and “Many mountains are having in Pakistan.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning harder to follow. Practise forming accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses using “because,” “which,” or “when.” Check verb forms and articles carefully, and use standard forms such as “people should learn” and “travel has become a hobby.”

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